Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your response is clear and directly answers the question, but you can improve by adding a concise topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it natural and avoid repeating simple negatives. Also try to vary vocabulary (e.g., ‘couldn't afford’ → ‘we couldn’t afford one back then’).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Because my family couldn’t afford one at the time, I usually walked to school or used public transport, so I didn’t learn to ride until I was a teenager.

提案: Good content and relevant reasons, but refine structure and language: start with a clear topic sentence, then add linked specific details or an example. Use more accurate vocabulary (e.g., ‘environmentally friendly’, ‘cause less pollution’). Avoid vague phrases like ‘doesn't harm many people’.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use them for daily commutes since they are environmentally friendly and cost-effective, and they cause far less pollution and traffic congestion than cars.

× No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one.

No article error present; sentence is correct. No change needed.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because it is one of the most commonly used forms of transportation and it is environment friendly.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are one of the most commonly used forms of transportation and they are environmentally friendly.

Errors: 'it' refers to 'bikes' (plural), so plural pronoun 'they' is needed (subject-pronoun agreement). 'environment friendly' is incorrect adjective form; use adverb-derived adjective 'environmentally friendly'. Also use plural verb 'are' to match 'bikes'. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their nouns and use correct adjective forms for describing qualities.

× It doesn't harm many people unlike cars that have pollution.

✓ It doesn't harm many people, unlike cars, which cause pollution.

Problems: 'have pollution' is unnatural; use 'cause pollution' to express that cars produce pollution. Also need a comma before and after the unlike clause for clarity, and replace 'that' with 'which' in a non-restrictive clause referring to cars. Suggestion: use verbs that collocate with 'pollution' (produce/cause) and punctuate unlike clauses with commas for readability.