Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, conciseness, and natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, avoid idiomatic overuse that may sound unnatural (e.g. "knee high to a grasshopper"), and use past tense consistently. Add one brief supporting detail (when you got it or how you used it) using a linking word.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bicycle when I was about six, and I used it every day to ride around the neighborhood. As a result, I became quite confident riding on busy streets.

提案: Use a clear, direct topic sentence and simpler, accurate vocabulary. Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and remove redundancies. Support your opinion with one or two specific reasons and a linking word (e.g. "because", "for example").

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are affordable and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work or to run errands in crowded city areas.

× Honestly speaking, when I was knee high to a grasshopper, then my father gifted me a bicycle. So at that time I have a bicycle.

✓ Honestly speaking, when I was knee-high to a grasshopper, my father gifted me a bicycle. So at that time I had a bicycle.

The student is relating past events, so past tense must be used consistently. 'Have' is present tense and should be changed to 'had' to match 'gifted' (simple past). Also remove the unnecessary 'then' after the time phrase and add a hyphen in 'knee-high'. Suggestion: Use simple past for sequences of past events (subject + past verb), e.g., 'my father gifted me' then 'I had a bicycle'. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× In my back of knowledge bikes are well known and my nation as everyone in my nation have a bikes which are which provide convenience to all the individual of my nation.

✓ To the best of my knowledge, bikes are well known in my country, and almost everyone in my country has a bike, which provides convenience to all individuals.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement and article/plural errors. 'Everyone' is singular and takes singular verb 'has' not 'have'. 'A bikes' is wrong; use singular 'a bike' or plural 'bikes' consistently. Also awkward phrasing 'my back of knowledge' should be 'to the best of my knowledge' and 'my nation' better as 'my country'. Use 'provides' to agree with singular noun 'a bike' or change to 'provide' if 'bikes' is subject. Suggestion: Simplify sentence: 'To the best of my knowledge, bikes are common in my country, and almost everyone has a bike, which provides convenience to individuals.' Grammar problem type ID: 27