Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and relevant. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief detail), then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (umm) and irrelevant emotional comments unless they add meaning. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, because, so, sometimes). Keep it to a maximum of 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was seven because it helped me get around the neighborhood. Sometimes we added training wheels at first to help me learn to balance, and later I removed them when I became more confident.

提案: Provide a clear, structured opinion with specific reasons and a linking word for coherence. Avoid hesitation and repetition. Give one or two concrete examples or statistics if possible (e.g., many students cycle to school, or bike lanes are common). Keep responses within 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many students cycle to school because it is cheap and convenient, and many cities have safe bike lanes. For example, I used to see dozens of children riding together every morning, which makes cycling a common and practical choice.

× When I was a child, I had my bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

Use the indefinite article 'a' before a singular countable noun when not specifying a particular item. 'My bike' implies ownership but earlier context doesn't require 'my'; using 'a bike' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'a' for general reference to one bike.

× It was bought by my father.

✓ My father bought it.

The sentence is grammatical but the active voice is more natural here. Changing to active voice places emphasis on the agent and improves fluency. Suggestion: use active forms when the doer is known and important.

× Umm, my father likes me very much.

✓ Umm, my father liked me very much.

Tense should match narrative about childhood (past). The pronoun 'me' is correct, but verb tense needs to be past to be consistent. Suggestion: keep past tense throughout childhood descriptions.

× Umm, actually, sometimes the bike is umm, we add two more.

✓ Umm, actually, sometimes we added two extra wheels to the bike.

Original sentence has unclear structure and mixed verbs. For childhood context, past tense is required. 'Add two more' is vague; specify 'two extra wheels' or 'training wheels'. The subject and verb should agree: 'we added' (past) with object clarified.

× Yeah, bike is very popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

When speaking generally about a category, use the plural noun 'bikes' with plural verb 'are'. Also 'yeah' is informal; 'yes' is preferable in test context. Suggestion: use plural for general statements.

× Umm, umm, when, when students are in child time, they will often take the bikes to go to school usually because maybe it's uh, just it's also convenient.

✓ When students are children, they often rode bikes to go to school because it was convenient.

Original mixes present, future, and awkward phrases. For describing habitual past behavior, use past tense ('rode' or 'would ride'). 'Students are in child time' is ungrammatical; use 'students are children' or 'when they are children'. Remove filler words and duplicate adverbs. Suggestion: choose consistent tense and clearer phrasing.

× It's the most convenient way and also the best way to go to school safely.

✓ It is the most convenient and the safest way to get to school.

Combine adjectives more naturally: 'the most convenient' and 'the safest'. Use 'get to school' rather than 'go to school' for variety. Maintain comparative/superlative structure: 'the safest' (superlative) for safety. Suggestion: pair superlative forms correctly and avoid repeating 'way' unnecessarily.