Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "cost cost" and repeating walking), and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct grammar: use past possession ('I didn't have a bike' or 'We couldn't afford bikes') and remove unnecessary articles. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Back then, bikes were quite expensive, so my family couldn’t afford one. As a result, I usually walked to school with my friends, which took about twenty minutes each way.

提案: Give a more balanced, specific answer and use linking words to show contrast. Instead of a short 'No', begin with a clear statement, then explain with a concrete reason and an example or consequence. Correct minor phrasing issues (e.g., 'most other families' → 'many families'). Keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country anymore. Because many families can now afford cars, most people prefer to drive for convenience, especially for commuting to work. However, bicycles remain common in some cities where traffic is heavy and cycling lanes are available.

× No, I didn't buy a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'). Using 'didn't buy' changes the meaning to an action (purchase) instead of possession. Use the base verb 'have' with did for past simple negative: 'didn't have'. Suggestion: Use 'have' with 'did/didn't' to talk about past possession.

× Cost cost a lot back then.

✓ They cost a lot back then.

The original lacks a proper subject and repeats 'cost'. To talk about bikes in general use the plural subject 'They' (referring to bikes) and the past verb 'cost' remains unchanged: 'They cost a lot back then.' Suggestion: Include an appropriate subject and avoid accidental repetition.

× So most of the families we couldn't afford buying a bike.

✓ So most of the families couldn't afford to buy a bike.

The original mixes clauses and has incorrect verb form 'afford buying'. The correct pattern is 'afford to + base verb' or 'afford + noun'. Also remove the unnecessary subject 'we' which makes the sentence ungrammatical here. Use 'couldn't afford to buy a bike.' Suggestion: Use 'couldn't afford to + verb' for inability to pay for an action.

× So most of the times we walked to the school, we walked to school.

✓ So most of the time we walked to school.

Use 'most of the time' (singular) rather than 'most of the times'. Also avoid repeating 'we walked'; one instance is enough. 'To school' is the usual idiom, not 'to the school' unless specifying a particular school. Suggestion: Use 'most of the time' and 'walked to school' for natural phrasing.

× No, they are not.

✓ No, they are not.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'They are not' correctly negates the plural subject 'bikes' for present tense. No change needed. Suggestion: None.

× Nowadays most other families can afford a car, so most of the time we drive a car.

✓ Nowadays most families can afford a car, so most of the time people drive cars.

'Most other families' is odd without comparison context; use 'most families'. The second clause switches pronouns from 'families' to 'we', causing inconsistency. Use a general subject 'people' or keep 'families'. Also use plural 'cars' for general statements. Maintain present simple for habitual action. Suggestion: Keep subjects consistent and use plural nouns for general statements.