Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and tells a clear story, but it's slightly wordy and has minor grammar issues (e.g., tense consistency and 'they' instead of 'we'). To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense use, and one or two specific supporting details. Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep the response within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike as a child because my father and I loved doing activities together. He bought me a simple bicycle and we painted and decorated it ourselves, even adding stickers we drew. That bike gave me many happy afternoons riding around the neighborhood.

提案: Your response answers the question directly and includes a reason, but it contains repetition ('not as not as'), informal word choice ('cause'), and some awkward phrasing. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, one concise reason with a linking word, and a short example or contrast. Keep language slightly more formal and correct connectors.

例: Not really. Bikes are mostly used for recreation rather than daily transport in my country because car ownership is high. For example, people usually cycle on weekends in parks or for exercise, but rarely commute to work by bike.

× As a kid, I've always wanted to do physical activities with my dad, and one of the things that he did when I was young was to go biking.

✓ As a kid, I always wanted to do physical activities with my dad, and one of the things he did when I was young was go biking.

The sentence uses the present perfect 'I've always wanted' which conflicts with the past time frame 'as a kid' and 'when I was young'. Use simple past or simple present consistently. Also after 'was' with 'one of the things' the base verb 'go' (bare infinitive) is more natural than 'to go' in this cleft structure. Suggestion: use 'I always wanted' or 'I wanted' to match past context and remove the extra 'to'.

× So my dad bought me a bike and we actually painted it from scratch and they put stickers and designed it on our own.

✓ So my dad bought me a bike and we actually painted it from scratch and we put stickers on it and designed it ourselves.

The sentence mixes pronouns: 'we' is the subject but then 'they' appears incorrectly. Also 'designed it on our own' is awkward; 'designed it ourselves' is correct reflexive use. Additionally, 'put stickers' needs the preposition 'on' to indicate placement. Suggestion: keep the same subject 'we', replace 'they' with 'we', add 'on' after 'stickers', and use 'ourselves' for reflexive emphasis.

× I think bikes are popular for hobbies, not as not as an everyday transportation system cause in my country there's a lot of cars and people barely use bikes to go to places they want to, it's only used for their hobbies.

✓ I think bikes are popular for hobbies, not as an everyday means of transportation, because in my country there are many cars and people rarely use bikes to get where they want; bikes are used mainly for hobbies.

Several issues: repetition 'not as not as' is an error. Informal 'cause' should be 'because'. 'There's a lot of cars' mixes singular contraction 'there's' with plural 'cars' (use 'there are' and 'many cars'). 'People barely use' is acceptable but 'rarely use' is more natural. The comma splice joins independent clauses; replace with a semicolon or split into sentences. Also 'it's only used for their hobbies' is vague and uses singular 'it's' while referring to plural 'bikes'—better to use 'bikes are used mainly for hobbies'. Suggestions: remove repetition, use 'because', use 'there are many cars', use 'rarely', and fix subject number agreement and clause separation.