Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer natural, direct, and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief specific reason. Avoid filler words and incorrect phrases (e.g., "too scary of riding bike"). Use linking words for clarity if you add details.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I was afraid of riding because I found balancing difficult, so my parents never bought one for me.

提案: Give a concise, well-structured response: topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Remove fillers ("uh") and correct wording ("go to work", "because of traffic"). Include a brief example or result to make it concrete.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them to get to work quickly because they can avoid traffic jams, and as a result commuting is often faster and cheaper.

× No, I didn't have a bike, even any vehicle because I was too scary of riding bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike or any vehicle because I was too scared to ride a bike.

The original sentence has plural/singular and word-choice issues: 'even any vehicle' is ungrammatical and should be 'or any vehicle'; 'too scary of riding bike' is incorrect: 'scary' describes something that causes fear, while 'scared' describes a person's feeling. Use 'scared to ride a bike'. Also include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Suggestion: use 'scared to' + base verb for ability/feeling (e.g., 'scared to ride').

× Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in our country nowadays because, uh, many people uh, want to go their works and uh, their jobs, uh, on time and uh, the traffic, uh.

✓ Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in our country nowadays because many people want to get to their work and their jobs on time because of traffic.

Errors include incorrect preposition and noun forms: 'go their works' is incorrect; use 'get to their work' or 'go to work'. 'Go their jobs' is wrong; use 'their jobs' with 'get to' or 'go to'. The phrase 'because, the traffic' is awkward; use 'because of traffic' to show reason. Remove redundant fillers for clarity. Suggestion: use 'get to' or 'go to' + 'work/job', and 'because of' to indicate cause.