Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition (e.g., "I" twice). Also keep within 3–4 sentences and use past tense consistently when talking about childhood.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it often for fun and exercise, especially around my neighborhood and to visit friends. However, I don’t use it much anymore because I now commute by bus.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then add specific, coherent supporting details and correct unclear words ("use it for shower" seems wrong). Use linking words (e.g., "for example", "also") and provide varied vocabulary (e.g., "commuting", "recreation"). Keep to 3–4 sentences total.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people cycle for recreation and exercise, for example along the riverside and in city parks. Additionally, a growing number of people use bicycles for short commutes to work or school because they are cheap and eco-friendly.

× Yes, when I was a child I had a bike at the time.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I had a bike.

Redundant phrase: 'at the time' repeats the time reference already established by 'when I was a child.' Remove 'at the time' to make the sentence concise and grammatically natural.

× I usually enjoy riding a bike for recreation and exercise.

✓ I usually enjoyed riding a bike for recreation and exercise.

Tense consistency: The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs describing habitual actions in that period should be in the past tense. Change 'enjoy' to 'enjoyed' to match the past time frame.

× Umm I use it a lot but now I I don't use it.

✓ Umm I used it a lot, but now I don't use it.

Tense consistency and repetition: 'Use' should be 'used' to reflect past habitual action. Also remove the duplicated 'I'. Keep 'now I don't use it' in the present to indicate the current situation.

× Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are fairly popular in my country.

No correction needed: The sentence is correctly in present tense because it expresses a current opinion. It is included here to indicate no change is required.

× Many people enjoy cycling for recreation and exercise.

✓ Many people enjoy cycling for recreation and exercise.

No correction needed: Present tense is appropriate for a general fact; the sentence is grammatically correct.

× For example, some people ride bikes along the Riverside and in the park, and some people also use it for shower.

✓ For example, some people ride bikes along the riverside and in the park, and some people also use them for commuting.

Pronoun and word choice: 'Bikes' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it.' 'Shower' is incorrect in this context; likely intended meaning is 'commuting' or 'transport.' Also 'Riverside' need not be capitalized unless it is a proper name; use lowercase 'riverside' for general reference. Ensure word choice matches the intended action.