Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and coherent: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases (e.g., "I remember"). Also correct small grammar issues ("I never got it back").

例: Yes, I did. I used my bicycle almost every day to ride around my neighborhood and visit friends. However, it was stolen once when I left it outside a shop, and I never got it back, which made me very upset.

提案: Give a complete, fluent response: use a clear topic sentence, add specific supporting details and examples, and avoid fillers ("umm", "uh"). Use linking words (e.g., "because", "for example", "also") and finish your sentence fully. Provide specific reasons and a location or context for your example.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for recreation and fitness. For example, young people often cycle along riverside paths and parks at weekends, and some commuters use bikes for short journeys to avoid traffic.

× When I was a child I had a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The sentence is correct in tense but needs a comma after the introductory time phrase 'When I was a child' for proper punctuation and clarity. Suggestion: include a comma after introductory adverbial clauses.

× I remember I used it a lot, but one day it was stolen and I remember I never got back.

✓ I remember I used it a lot, but one day it was stolen and I never got it back.

The past tense is appropriate, but the clause 'I never got back' is missing the object 'it'. Use 'I never got it back' to complete the transitive verb 'got'. Also remove the redundant second 'I remember' to improve fluency. Suggestion: include the object after 'got' and avoid repeating phrases.

× Yes, bicycles are fairly popular in my country because many people enjoy riding bicycle for, umm, recreation and exercise.

✓ Yes, bicycles are fairly popular in my country because many people enjoy riding bicycles for recreation and exercise.

When referring to the activity of riding in general, use the plural count noun 'bicycles' or the gerund phrase 'riding bicycles'. The singular 'bicycle' is incorrect without an article. Also remove filler 'umm' and the unnecessary comma. Suggestion: use the plural form or an uncountable gerund phrase and avoid fillers.

× For example, umm, young people, uh, enjoy cycling along the.

✓ For example, young people enjoy cycling along the riverside.

The original sentence is incomplete; it ends with 'along the.' Provide a noun to complete the prepositional phrase (e.g., 'riverside', 'seafront', 'park paths'). Remove fillers 'umm' and 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: complete the prepositional phrase with an appropriate noun and omit hesitation sounds.