Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce minor grammatical errors and improve sentence structure: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep the response natural and within 3–4 sentences. Correct verb forms (e.g., “had a bike”), articles (“a bright red bicycle”), and remove unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a bright red bicycle with training wheels, and I often rode it to visit friends and explore my neighborhood. Because I practiced every day, riding helped me gain confidence and feel more independent.

提案: Clarify and organize ideas: give a clear topic sentence stating your opinion, then support it with specific reasons and examples using linking words (for example, “because,” “for instance,” “therefore”). Correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., “bikes are not popular,” “I don’t see many on the road,” “people drive cars,” “go to other cities”). Avoid unclear phrases like “take the tree.”

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my city. For example, I rarely see bicycles on the roads because most people prefer driving cars to commute to work. Also, when people travel to other cities they usually drive or use buses instead of cycling.

× Yes, I did have back when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child.

The sentence uses 'did have' redundantly with 'back' misplaced. Use simple past 'had' to describe possession in the past. Remove 'back' or replace with 'back then' if needed. Suggestion: 'Yes, I had one when I was a child.'

× It was bright red bicycle with training wheels and I rode it to visit my friends and explore my neighborhood, which helped me build confidence and independence.

✓ It was a bright red bicycle with training wheels, and I rode it to visit my friends and explore my neighborhood, which helped me build confidence and independence.

The noun 'bicycle' needs the indefinite article 'a'. Also add a comma before the coordinating conjunction 'and' to separate clauses. This corrects article omission and improves sentence clarity.

× OK, I think back it is the bikes are not popular in my country because in my city I couldn't see many back on the road.

✓ OK, I think bikes are not popular in my country because in my city I don't see many on the road.

The original mixes past and present forms and includes misplaced words 'back' and redundant 'it is'. Use present simple 'think' with present simple 'are not popular' and 'don't see' to describe a general current situation. Remove extraneous words.

× I just see the people drive car to go for work, then they usually take the tree go some city to travel.

✓ I just see people driving cars to go to work; then they usually take a bus or drive to another city to travel.

Multiple errors: 'the people' and 'car' need correct articles/pronouns and noun forms. Use gerund 'driving' after 'see' to describe observation. 'Take the tree' is incorrect; likely intended 'take a train' or 'take a bus'. Provide a clear correction with likely meaning: 'take a bus or drive to another city'. Also add 'to' before 'work' and pluralize 'cars' for general reference.