Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and concise: start with a topic sentence directly answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (tenses, articles, word order) and avoid hesitation or fragmented sentences. For example, say when you had the bike, why it was three-wheeled, and when/how you learned to ride a two-wheeler.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child. It was a three-wheeled training bike because I was very young and still learning balance. However, I didn’t learn to ride a two-wheeler until I was about 15, when a friend taught me and I practised regularly for a few weeks.

提案: Answer directly, then give two clear reasons with specific examples and use linking words (for example, moreover). Avoid fillers and unclear phrases. Improve vocabulary by using words like "bike-sharing schemes," "commute," and "recreation."

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, bike-sharing schemes run by large companies make cycling convenient for short commutes, and many people also cycle for recreation or exercise on weekends. Moreover, cycling is encouraged in some cities because it reduces traffic and pollution.

× Yes, I used to have a child bike with three wheels because I didn't.

✓ Yes, I used to have a child's bike with three wheels because I didn't know how to ride a regular bike then.

The original sentence is incomplete and mixes clauses incorrectly. 'Used to' is correct for past habitual action, but 'child bike' should be 'child's bike' (possessive noun). The clause 'because I didn't' is incomplete; it needs an object/verb (didn't know how to ride). Also specify 'regular bike' to contrast. Suggestion: complete the clause and use the possessive form for clarity. Next steps: replace 'child bike' with 'child's bike' and complete 'because I didn't' to 'because I didn't know how to ride a regular bike.'

× I didn't know how to probably ride a bike back then, and it was not until 15 that I finally learned how to.

✓ I didn't know how to ride a bike back then, and it was not until I was 15 that I finally learned.

Word order and structure are incorrect. 'Probably' is misplaced and unnecessary; use 'didn't know how to ride' without 'probably.' Also '15' needs a subject/age phrase: 'I was 15.' The clause 'learned how to' is incomplete without an object; 'learned' alone is sufficient when referring to learning to ride, or use 'learned how to ride.' Suggestion: remove 'probably,' add 'I was' before '15,' and complete the verb phrase as 'learned' or 'learned how to ride.'

× Ride A2 wheel bike.

✓ I learned to ride a two-wheel bike.

This fragment lacks a subject and proper verb form; it's a sentence fragment. 'A2' seems intended as 'a two-' and should be written 'two-wheel bike.' Use 'learned to ride' or 'learned how to ride' with a subject: 'I learned to ride a two-wheel bike.' Suggestion: avoid fragments and write full sentences with subject and verb. Next steps: replace 'Ride A2 wheel bike.' with 'I learned to ride a two-wheel bike.'

× You know they are sharing bikes funded by big companies for people to commute between their company and home.

✓ You know they share bikes funded by big companies for people to commute between their companies and home.

The progressive 'are sharing' is awkward here when describing a general fact; the simple present 'share' is more appropriate for habitual or general truths. Also 'their company' should match plural antecedent 'people' so use 'their companies.' Suggestion: use simple present for general statements and ensure pronoun agreement: 'they share bikes... between their companies and home.'

× A lot of people ride bikes to uh, work for leisure or to some places.

✓ A lot of people ride bikes to work, for leisure, or to go to certain places.

The original mixes purposes and destinations without parallel structure. 'Ride bikes to work' is fine; 'for leisure' should be separated with commas; 'to some places' is vague and lacks parallelism—use 'to go to certain places' or 'to other places.' Suggestion: keep parallel structure for list items and clarify vague expressions.

× That is too far forward.

✓ Those places are too far away.

'Too far forward' is not idiomatic when describing distance; use 'too far away.' Also 'that' likely refers to plural 'places,' so use 'those places.' Suggestion: use 'too far away' to indicate excessive distance and match number with the noun referred to.