Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, fluency and relevance. Use past tense consistently, avoid filler words (umm, uh), and make the response more coherent and relevant (riding a bike is not typically a bedtime activity). Keep answer within 2–4 sentences, start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details and a linking word.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a red bicycle that I often rode with my brother and sister around our neighborhood, and we competed to see who could ride fastest. Because of those rides, I developed more confidence and enjoyed outdoor activities.

提案: Work on accuracy, clarity and cohesion. Give a clear topic sentence answering the question, then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words (for example, however, because). Correct grammar (use plural/singular agreement and correct verb forms) and avoid fillers. Limit to 2–4 sentences and include one concrete example.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among women, because many families prefer cars for safety and social reasons. However, my family was quite open-minded, so they encouraged my sisters and me to learn cycling, and we practiced in the local park every weekend.

× Well, yes I do.

✓ Well, yes I did.

The question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is in the past tense. The student's reply should use past tense as well. 'Do' is present tense; change to 'did' to match the past-time reference. Suggestion: Use past tense verbs to describe past experiences (e.g., 'Yes, I did.').

× it was one of the most, umm, exciting activities I have to did, uh, with my brother and sister during bedtime.

✓ it was one of the most, umm, exciting activities I did with my brother and sister at bedtime.

The phrase 'have to did' is ungrammatical: 'did' is simple past, and 'have to' indicates obligation and requires a base verb, not a past tense. The intended meaning is a past completed action, so use simple past 'did'. Also 'during bedtime' is better expressed as 'at bedtime'. Suggestion: Use simple past for completed past activities and replace awkward phrases (e.g., 'I did with my brother and sister at bedtime').

× with my brother and sister during bedtime.

✓ with my brother and sister at bedtime.

The preposition 'during' is used for longer periods or events; 'at bedtime' is the common collocation when referring to the specific time children go to bed. Suggestion: Learn common prepositional collocations (e.g., 'at bedtime', 'in the morning').

× They are not really encouraged to, uh, ride a bike.

✓ Females are not really encouraged to ride a bike.

The pronoun 'They' is vague here and shifts reference; the speaker had just said 'for a female', so using the plural noun 'females' or 'girls/women' keeps agreement and clarity. Also pronoun use should match number and gender context. Suggestion: Use clear nouns or matching pronouns to avoid ambiguity (e.g., 'girls are not encouraged...').

× But my family was a kind of open mind family and they was, uh, supporting us and wanted us to, you know, trying a lot of new things.

✓ But my family was a kind of open-minded family and they were supporting us and wanted us to, you know, try a lot of new things.

Multiple issues: 'open mind' should be the adjective 'open-minded' (word form error), 'they was' is subject-verb agreement (use 'were'), 'supporting us and wanted us to try' requires parallel verb forms and 'try' (base form) after 'wanted us to'. 'Trying' is incorrect after 'wanted us to'. Suggestion: Use correct adjective forms ('open-minded'), match subject and verb ('they were'), and maintain verb form after 'wanted us to' (base infinitive: 'try').

× they was, uh, supporting us

✓ they were supporting us

The plural subject 'they' requires the plural past verb 'were', not 'was'. Suggestion: Ensure verb forms agree with plural subjects (e.g., I was, he/she was, we/they were).

× wanted us to, you know, trying a lot of new things.

✓ wanted us to, you know, try a lot of new things.

After 'wanted us to' the verb should be in its base infinitive form ('to try'), not the -ing form. Using '-ing' here is ungrammatical. Suggestion: After verbs like 'want somebody to', use the base infinitive (e.g., 'wanted us to try').