Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan ancak biraz dilbilgisi ve akıcılık hataları var. "when I was fifth" ifadesi yanlış; doğru ifade "when I was in fifth grade" ya da "when I was five" olmalı. Cümle doğal ve kısa, fakat bir iki destekleyici ayrıntı (nerede, nasıl kullandığınız veya hangi tip bisiklet olduğu) eklenirse cevap daha etkili olur. Bağlaçlar gerekmez ama ek detay verirken basit bağlaçlar (for example, so, because) kullanılabilir. Kelime seçimi basit ve uygun, fakat küçük düzeltmelerle daha akıcı olur.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in fifth grade. It was a blue mountain bike that I used to ride to school and to the nearby park almost every afternoon, so I became quite confident riding on busy streets.

提案: Cevap iyi fikirler içeriyor ancak dilbilgisi ve bağlaç kullanımı geliştirilmelidir. "it's depends" yerine "it depends" veya "popularity depends on the city" demek daha doğru. Karşılaştırma yaparken 'not as common as in Germany' ve örnek verirken 'for example' veya 'in some areas, such as Ankara' gibi ifadelerle cümleler daha düzgün bağlanır. Daha spesifik veriler (ör. bisiklet yolları, hava koşulları, kültürel sebepler) eklenirse cevap daha ikna edici olur.

例: It depends on the region and the city. In general, bikes are not as common in Turkey as they are in Germany, but in some cities, such as Ankara, cycling is quite popular because there are dedicated bike lanes and many people commute short distances by bicycle.

× Of course I had a bike when I was fifth.

✓ Of course I had a bike when I was five.

Usage of ordinal 'fifth' is incorrect for indicating age; use the cardinal number 'five' after 'was' to state age. Say 'when I was five' not 'when I was fifth.'

× Actually it's depends on the country and the city.

✓ Actually it depends on the country and the city.

The contraction 'it's' (it is) combined with the verb 'depends' causes an extra auxiliary 'is' that is not needed. Use 'it depends' (simple present) to express general truth. Also remove the apostrophe form.

× In Turkey I believe it's not common like Germany, but in some areas it's very popular like Ankara.

✓ In Turkey, I believe it's not as common as in Germany, but in some areas, such as Ankara, it's very popular.

Comparisons require 'as ... as' or 'not as ... as' rather than 'not common like.' Also include 'in' before country names when comparing ('as in Germany'). Use 'such as' to introduce an example city. Adding commas improves clarity.