Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense and choose a concise, natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details (who gave it to you, where you rode it, a short memory). Use linking words like “and” or “when” and keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was seven years old. My parents bought it for me as a birthday present, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon after school.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then support with specific reasons and a short example. Use linking words such as “because,” “for example,” or “however” to connect ideas and vary vocabulary (use “popular” alternatives like “commonly used” or “widely used”). Keep sentences natural and avoid repetition.

例: Not really. I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer cars for convenience and longer distances. For example, public roads and parking are designed mainly for cars, so cycling is less common in cities.

× Yes, I do. I have my bike when I was seven years old.

✓ Yes, I did. I had my bike when I was seven years old.

The student mixes present tense ('do', 'have') with a past time reference ('when I was seven years old'). Use past tense to describe past possession. Change 'do' to 'did' and 'have' to 'had' to match the past time frame. Suggestion: When mentioning a specific past time, use past simple consistently (e.g., 'I did. I had...').

× No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because most of the people in our country transport by cars more than bikes.

✓ No, I don't think bikes are popular in my country because most people in our country travel by car more than by bike.

The sentence uses 'transport by cars' which is unnatural and contains plural/article issues. Use 'travel' for people moving and the uncountable/collective form 'car' after 'by'. Also 'most of the people' is wordy; 'most people' is preferred. Ensure parallel form: 'by car' and 'by bike'. Suggestion: Use verbs that collocate with people (travel) and the correct 'by + vehicle' phrases (by car, by bike), and simplify 'most of the people' to 'most people'.