Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, grammatically correct, and structured. Start with a clear topic sentence (past simple), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms, articles, and pronouns (e.g., “a bike”, “she had”), and avoid repetition. Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I felt a little jealous of my cousin because she had one, so I often borrowed her bike to practice. After a few weeks of practice, I learned how to ride confidently.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use correct noun forms and avoid filler words. Use a linking phrase (e.g., “because”, “for example”) and keep responses to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many children use them for play and short journeys. For example, when I was young, owning a bike was considered special and many families encouraged children to learn to ride.

× Unfortunately I don't have bike that's why I am very like a little bit jealous with my cousins because every time when we play outside I saw that she have a bike.

✓ Unfortunately I didn't have a bike, so I was a little jealous of my cousins because every time we played outside I saw that she had a bike.

Tense consistency and verb forms: The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have') with past context ('when you were a child'). Use past tense for events in the past: 'didn't have' and 'was' instead of 'don't have' and 'am'. Also 'saw' should be 'saw' is OK but better 'I saw that she had a bike' to match past. Grammar and preposition: 'jealous with' is incorrect; use 'jealous of'. Also 'a bike' needs the article 'a'. Suggestions: Keep all verbs in past when describing childhood, use correct preposition 'of', and include articles before singular countable nouns.

× So I just borrow a bike from her.

✓ So I just borrowed a bike from her.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: The context is past, so use past tense 'borrowed' not present 'borrow'. Ensure verb form matches past narrative.

× So what I do is I just practice bike until I know how to bike and also and.

✓ So what I did was practice riding a bike until I learned how to ride.

Incorrect verb and gerund use: 'practice bike' is incorrect; use 'practice riding a bike' (verb + -ing) or 'practice riding'. Tense consistency requires past tense 'did' and 'learned' instead of present 'do' and 'know'. Also avoid redundant 'and also and'. Suggestions: Use 'practice' + gerund for activities and match past tense when telling past events.

× Yes, I think so because when I was a child, I think bike is one of the happiest thing or or play that the that that we have before when we are a child.

✓ Yes, I think so because when I was a child, a bike was one of the happiest things to have or one of the most fun toys we had as children.

Tense and article errors: The sentence uses present tense 'is' and 'are' while referring to past 'when I was a child'; change to past 'was' and 'had'. Countable noun error: 'thing' should be plural 'things' and needs an article 'a bike' or 'a bike was one of the happiest things'. Redundancy and structure: Remove repeated words and restructure for clarity ('one of the happiest things to have' or 'one of the most fun toys'). Suggestions: Keep tense consistent, use articles with singular nouns, and use plural for general nouns when appropriate.

× So if you have a bike, it's like a dream come true.

✓ So if you had a bike, it felt like a dream come true.

Pronoun and tense consistency: The original mixes hypothetical present 'if you have' with past narrative; in a past context, use past unreal or past habitual 'if you had' and 'it felt'. If speaking generally about children now, present is acceptable, but within this past description use past forms. Suggestions: Match conditional tense to narrative timeframe: use 'if you had' for past situations and 'if you have' for general present statements.