Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words if needed. For example, say why you didn't have one or how you felt about it. Avoid overly formal phrasing (e.g., “in my childhood”) and unnecessary negatives.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I grew up in a small apartment and my parents thought it was unsafe to let me ride alone, so I usually played at nearby parks instead.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then give specific and coherent reasons using linking words. Improve grammar (singular/plural, articles) and avoid repetition. Provide concrete examples (commuting, exercise, cost) to support your point and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people use them for short commutes and for exercise because they are cheap and convenient. For example, teenagers often ride to school or to meet friends, while adults sometimes cycle to work to avoid traffic.

× No, I did not have a bike in my childhood.

✓ No, I did not have a bike when I was a child.

The original sentence uses 'in my childhood' which is not idiomatic in response to the question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?'. This is a wording/tense context issue: use the same time phrase as the question. Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' or 'as a child' to clearly match the past time frame.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because so many of the people are using bikes for a short ride and a long rides to especially in adolescence.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in our country because many people use them for short and long rides, especially during adolescence.

This sentence has multiple present-tense usage and noun/number issues. 'So many of the people are using' is wordy and awkward; simple present 'many people use' is correct for general facts. 'are using' (present continuous) is not necessary. 'a short ride and a long rides' mixes singular and plural; use 'short and long rides'. 'to especially in adolescence' is ungrammatical; use 'especially during adolescence' to indicate the time period. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual/general statements and correct plural agreement and preposition.

× Peoples also very much fascinate about the riding in the riding on a bike because.

✓ People are also very interested in riding bikes.

'Peoples' is incorrect pluralization; use 'people'. 'Fascinate about' is incorrect: 'fascinated by' or 'interested in' are correct. 'the riding in the riding on a bike' is redundant and ungrammatical. The sentence fragment ends with 'because' without completing the reason. Suggestion: use 'People are also very interested in riding bikes' or 'People are fascinated by riding bikes' and complete the thought if giving a reason.