Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak in the past tense consistently, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use linking words (e.g., "when", "because", "so") and correct grammar for clarity. Also keep the answer concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes. I had a bicycle as a child; my aunt bought it for me when I was about 15. She bought it because she wanted me to learn how to ride safely, and I practiced with her for several weeks until I felt confident.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure, and include linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas. Avoid unclear phrases and repetitions. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with specific details (who uses bikes, where, and why).

例: Yes, absolutely. Bicycles are very popular in my country because they are cheap and easy to use, especially in narrow streets where cars cannot go. For example, many market vendors and students use bikes to commute short distances every day.

× Yes, I have one bike when I was a child my aunt bought it for me when I'm around 15 years old and the purpose of this bike is she need to practicing me for bikes the bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had one bike when I was a child; my aunt bought it for me when I was around 15 years old, and the purpose of this bike was that she needed to teach me to ride a bicycle.

Multiple tense errors and related grammar problems: the student mixes present and past tenses ('have' with 'was a child', 'I'm around 15' with past context). Use past tense consistently for past events: 'had', 'was', 'needed', 'to teach' (infinitive) and 'ride' (verb) are correct. Also clarify word choice: 'teach me to ride a bicycle' is natural. Suggestion: decide the time frame (past) and keep verbs in past tense; use correct infinitive forms after verbs like 'needed' ('needed to teach').

× Yes, absol, absolutely. Vice is popular in my country because people in my country, their shoes, bikes, modern car or motorcycle, when they need to go into the narrow streets and go some.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Bikes are popular in my country because people there use bikes when they need to go into narrow streets.

Problems include wrong subject-verb forms and unclear wording. 'Vice is popular' is incorrect; correct plural subject 'bikes' requires plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement). The original also has extra words ('their shoes', 'go some') that are irrelevant or ungrammatical. Simplify to a clear causal sentence. Suggestion: use the plural noun 'bikes' with 'are', remove irrelevant fragments, and use 'use bikes' to express purpose.