Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer partly addresses the question but uses a conditional sentence that diverts from directly answering. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, then briefly expand with a reason or short consequence. Keep sentences natural and correct tense (simple past for facts). Avoid unnecessary hypothetical unless asked.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. I wanted one, though, and I often walked to school or took the bus instead. If I had had a bike, I would probably have ridden it every day to visit my friends and explore the neighborhood.

提案: Your answer conveys the main idea but has several grammar and clarity issues. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and short reason). Use correct verb tenses and linking words (e.g., 'in the past', 'nowadays', 'because', 'so'). Provide one or two specific supporting details such as statistics, reasons, or examples, and keep to 2–3 sentences total.

例: Yes, bikes have become more popular in my country nowadays. In the past people preferred cars because traffic was lighter, but recently heavy congestion and parking problems have encouraged more people to choose cycling as a faster and cheaper alternative.

× Unfortunately no, but if I had a bike when I was young I would ride every day.

✓ Unfortunately no, but if I had had a bike when I was young I would have ridden every day.

The sentence expresses an unreal condition in the past. Use the past perfect in the if-clause (had had) and the perfect conditional in the result clause (would have + past participle). Current form mixes past hypothetical with simple conditional, which is incorrect for past counterfactuals. Suggestion: use 'If I had had...' and 'I would have ridden...'.

× Nowadays yes, but used to not really is because of the traffic wasn't that bad at the past, but now the traffic's is possible to stock in one spot around 2-3 hours so.

✓ Nowadays yes, but it didn't use to be that way because the traffic wasn't so bad in the past; now traffic can be stuck in one spot for around two to three hours.

Multiple errors: 'used to not really is' is incorrect structure — use 'didn't use to be' for past habitual states. 'at the past' should be 'in the past' (preposition error). 'the traffic's is possible to stock' is incorrect verb choice and unnecessary contraction; use 'traffic can be stuck'. 'stock' is wrong word. 'for around 2-3 hours' is clearer when written 'for around two to three hours' and remove trailing 'so'. Suggestions: restructure sentence into clear clauses, use 'didn't use to be', 'in the past', 'can be stuck', and spell out numbers in speech transcripts for clarity.