Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief fact), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and pronoun agreement (e.g., "it had training wheels") and avoid redundancy (e.g., "If I remembered it clearly" is unnecessary). Limit to 3–4 sentences and sequence events clearly (what happened, result).

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but I stopped riding it after an accident. I used to ride in my village where the bike had training wheels, and one day I lost control on a slope and fell. After that I was afraid of riding for a long time.

提案: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary (use "popular" or "common" rather than "famous"). Give one clear reason with linking words and finish the thought—avoid unfinished sentences. Use correct pronouns and concise phrasing (e.g., "people choose them"). Limit to 2–3 sentences and include specific detail such as who uses bikes and why.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities and rural areas. Recently many people have switched to bikes because fuel prices have risen, so bikes are a cheaper and more convenient way to travel.

× If I remembered it clearly, I did have a bike, but I didn't ride it for a long time since I had an accident with it.

✓ If I remember it clearly, I did have a bike, but I didn't ride it for a long time because I had an accident with it.

The original sentence mixes past tense 'remembered' with a present reference to memory; use present tense 'remember' for recalling past events. Also, 'since' can be ambiguous for time or cause; 'because' is clearer to show cause here.

× So I was riding it inside the village and it has the training wheels on them and it was a slope going down and I wasn't able to control well.

✓ So I was riding it inside the village and it had training wheels on it, and there was a slope going down so I couldn't control it well.

Pronoun and agreement errors: 'it has the training wheels on them' mixes singular 'it' with plural 'them' and wrong tense. Use 'it had training wheels on it.' 'It was a slope going down' is unnatural; use 'there was a slope going down.' Also 'wasn't able to control well' is corrected to 'couldn't control it well' for natural past ability expression.

× Yes, I do think bikes are famous in our country.

✓ Yes, I do think bikes are popular in our country.

'Famous' describes people or landmarks known widely; 'popular' is the correct adjective for things that many people use or like.

× Since gas prices spiked up recently because of the war happening in the in the world, bikes have been their option, their best choice for transportation.

✓ Since gas prices spiked recently because of wars in the world, bikes have become people's best option for transportation.

Awkward structure and incorrect pronoun 'their' referring to an undefined group. 'Spiked up' can be 'spiked'; 'have been their option' should be 'have become people's option'. Also remove duplicate 'the' and simplify 'war happening in the in the world' to 'wars in the world'.

× It's convenient, it doesn't need to.

✓ They're convenient and do not require fuel.

The original is a fragment and ends abruptly 'it doesn't need to.' Bicycles are plural ('they') and need clarification what they 'don't need' — typically fuel or gas. So rephrase to a complete sentence: 'They're convenient and do not require fuel.'