Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng thì quá khứ khi nói về ký ức, sắp xếp câu rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ vô nghĩa. Cụ thể: bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề ngắn (Yes/No + thông tin chính), sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết về lúc nào, ai tặng, và cảm xúc hoặc hoạt động liên quan. Dùng thì quá khứ đơn (had, bought) và các liên từ đơn giản (when, so, because) để nối ý. Tránh tiếng ồn (uh uh) và lỗi từ vựng như “food bike”.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was five, and I used to ride it to visit my friends every afternoon. I remember feeling very proud because it was my first big present.

提案: Trả lời rõ ràng, dùng từ vựng chính xác (bikes, motorcycles) và cấu trúc so sánh ngắn gọn. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề nêu quan điểm, tiếp theo giải thích lý do với ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng linking words như “because” hoặc “however” để câu mạch lạc. Tránh lẫn lộn giữa “bikes” và “buys” và cụm từ không hợp lý như “motorbike car”.

例: I think bicycles are less popular now in my country because many people prefer motorbikes and cars for convenience. For example, in cities most commuters use motorbikes due to faster travel and easier parking.

× Yes, I have a bike when I ask a child. Uh uh, I have a food bike at when I. Five years ago, my parents buy bike for me to me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At five years old, my parents bought a bike for me.

The student mixed present and past tenses and used incorrect verb forms and word order. Use past tense 'had' and 'was' to match the time reference 'when I was a child'. 'Five years ago' or 'at five years old' requires past tense 'bought' (not 'buy'), and the phrase 'for me' goes at the end. Suggestion: identify time markers (e.g., when I was a child, five years ago) and use past tense verbs consistently; practice forming simple past (subject + past verb) and correct word order (time phrase + subject + verb + object).

× Now I think buys are not popular in my country because my country has many bicycles and motorbike car.

✓ Now I think bikes are not popular in my country because there are many bicycles and motorbikes.

The student used incorrect noun form 'buys' and confused vehicle terms. Use 'bikes' for bicycles and 'motorbikes' for motorcycles. Also use 'there are' to state existence in present tense. Suggestion: use the correct noun forms and the 'there is/there are' structure to describe existence; practice subject-verb agreement and vocabulary for vehicles.