Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on clarity, grammar, and concise structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and word choice (e.g., “when I was a child”), remove filler words (uh), and limit to 2–4 sentences. Add one specific detail (where you rode, how often) and use linking words for coherence (for example, because, so, and).

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I usually rode my bike to school and to the park with my friends. It was my main way of getting around because it was quick, cheap, and good exercise.

提案: Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), accurate vocabulary (e.g., “used mostly by kids aged 5 to 15”), and a clearer structure: give a direct answer, then one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, children aged about 5 to 15 often ride bicycles to school and to meet friends because it is inexpensive and convenient.

× Yeah, I did, uh, when I was dried, I usually rode my bike to go to school or whenever or whenever went out to play with my friend.

✓ Yeah, I did. When I was a child, I usually rode my bike to go to school or whenever I went out to play with my friends.

The student used 'dried' which is incorrect; the intended word is 'child' (a vocabulary error, but treated here as past-tense context). Additionally, 'whenever went out' lacks a subject and should be 'whenever I went out'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match general meaning. 'Usually rode' correctly uses past tense; add missing subjects and correct noun forms to make the sentence grammatical. Suggestion: Use the correct noun 'child', always include the subject after time words (e.g., 'whenever I...'), and use plural for general references ('friends').

× I also use it.

✓ I also used it.

The conversation is about past habits, so the verb should be in past tense 'used' rather than present 'use'. Use consistent tense for past habitual actions. Suggestion: When describing past routines, use simple past ('used', 'rode').

× Uh, I think that is the easy, easy and convenient way to going around.

✓ Uh, I think that is an easy and convenient way to get around.

'Easy, easy' is redundant; use one 'easy'. 'That is' describing a noun requires an article 'an' before 'easy'. 'Way to going around' incorrectly uses the gerund 'going' after 'way to'; the correct form is 'way to get around' or 'way of getting around'. Suggestion: Use 'an easy and convenient way to get around' for idiomatic phrasing.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and is a is a used most by the UMM kids for around 5 to 15 years old because riding by to go to school or hang out with friend a very convenient and easy way.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country and are used most by kids aged around 5 to 15 years old because riding them to go to school or to hang out with friends is a very convenient and easy way.

Multiple issues: 'and is a is a used' has incorrect verb forms and extra words; the subject 'bikes' requires plural verb 'are used'. 'the UMM kids' is unclear—remove 'UMM' unless necessary. 'for around 5 to 15 years old' should be 'kids aged around 5 to 15 years old'. 'riding by' is wrong; use 'riding them'. 'hang out with friend' needs plural 'friends'. Also the clause needs a linking verb: 'is a very convenient and easy way'. Suggestion: Simplify structure: 'are used most by kids aged 5 to 15 because riding them to school or to hang out with friends is very convenient and easy.'