Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est très courte et manque de développement. Donnez une phrase topique claire suivie d’un ou deux détails concrets (par exemple qui vous l’a donné, à quel âge, comment vous l’utilisiez). Évitez les réponses d’un mot et ajoutez des mots de liaison si nécessaire pour améliorer la cohérence.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike from my parents when I was six, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. It helped me learn balance and made me spend more time outdoors, especially with neighborhood friends.

提案: La réponse contient des hésitations et des répétitions (« umm »). Structurez votre opinion avec une phrase claire, puis fournissez deux raisons précises (par ex. sécurité, infrastructure) en utilisant des mots de liaison comme « because » ou « however ». Remplacez les hésitations par des pauses silencieuses et utilisez un vocabulaire précis lié aux transports et à la sécurité.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic can be dangerous. As a result, many people prefer cars or motorcycles for safety and convenience, although cycling is more common in quieter suburban areas.

× Umm, not uh, really, but because umm, it's not safe.

✓ Not really, because it's not safe.

The original contains fillers and an unnecessary conjunction 'but' that creates a fragmented sentence. Remove fillers ('umm', 'uh') and the redundant 'but' to form a clear response: 'Not really, because it's not safe.' This aligns with the question's present-tense context and produces a complete sentence with subject and verb. Suggestion: Practice giving concise answers without filler words and ensure each response has one clear main clause.

× In my country there is no umm uh, street just for bikes.

✓ In my country there are no streets just for bikes.

The issue is subject-verb agreement and countable plural noun choice. 'Street' should be plural 'streets' because the statement refers generally to dedicated bike lanes/streets, and the verb should be 'there are' to match the plural noun. Also remove fillers ('umm', 'uh'). Suggestion: Use 'there is' with singular and 'there are' with plural; use plural nouns when talking about things in general across a country.