Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant and personal, but there are small grammar and tense mistakes and one long sentence that could be clearer. Improve by using correct past tense forms, vary sentence structure (a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail), and avoid unnecessary repetition. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences and include one specific detail (e.g., where you rode or who taught you).

例: Yes, I had a bicycle as a child. My parents gave it to me for my tenth birthday, and I often rode it around the park near our house on weekends because it made me feel free and excited.

提案: The idea is understandable but speech is disfluent and contains many hesitations, pronunciation errors, and grammar mistakes. To improve, prepare a short structured response: state your opinion, give one or two clear reasons with linking words (e.g., 'because', 'however'), and provide a specific example. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and practise pronunciation of key words (bikes, vehicles).

例: I think bicycles are not very popular in my country nowadays because there are many cars and motorbikes on the roads. For example, most people prefer motorbikes for commuting, so bicycles are mainly used for exercise or on weekend rides.

× My parents give it to me for my birthday and I used to ride it around the neighborhood at weekends because it made me feel free and excited.

✓ My parents gave it to me for my birthday, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood on weekends because it made me feel free and excited.

The sentence describes past events, so the verb 'give' should be in the past tense 'gave' to match 'used to' and 'made'. Also, replace 'at weekends' with 'on weekends' for natural preposition use in this context. Suggestion: ensure all main verbs referring to past events use past tense to maintain consistency.

× Actually, I think buys are popular in my country uh because uh nowadays there are too many uh vehicle on the road uh, there are a lot of car and motorbikes so uh bike uh, so people you buy to travel everyday It is.

✓ Actually, I think bikes are popular in my country because nowadays there are too many vehicles on the road; there are a lot of cars and motorbikes, so people buy bikes to travel every day.

Multiple errors: 'buys' is a misspelling and should be 'bikes' (noun), so this is not a pronoun error but overall word choice—however main grammatical problems include plural agreement: 'vehicle' should be plural 'vehicles' and 'car' should be plural 'cars'. The phrase 'people you buy to travel' is incorrect pronoun/word order; it should be 'people buy bikes to travel'. Also 'everyday' (adjective) should be 'every day' (adverbial phrase). Suggestions: use correct plural nouns to match 'there are', ensure subject-verb order 'people buy', and use 'every day' when meaning 'each day'.