Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use past tense, avoid repetition, and give one or two brief supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then add a short detail about the bike (type, when you got it, or how you used it). Keep it natural and limit to 1–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was seven, and I used to ride it to visit friends and explore the neighborhood.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler sounds and repetition. Mention concrete groups, reasons, or examples (e.g. who uses bikes, typical journeys, or why they’re popular). Keep to 2–3 sentences and use plural/singular correctly.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in Pakistan. For example, many middle-class people use motorbikes to commute to work or school because they are affordable and convenient in heavy traffic.

× Yes, I have. I have a bike and I yes, I have bike.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so replies should be in past tense rather than present perfect or simple present. 'Yes, I have' is present and inappropriate here. Use 'Yes, I did' for a short affirmative answer and 'I had a bike' to describe possession in the past. Also include the article 'a' before 'bike'. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed past situations: 'Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.'

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country as uh, every, uh, middle class persons have uh bike and they travel to office or school by this.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because many middle-class people have bikes and they travel to work or school by them.

Multiple errors: 'every, middle class persons' is ungrammatical; use 'many middle-class people' or 'most middle-class people'. 'Persons' is formal and rare here; 'people' is natural. 'have bike' misses the article; use 'have bikes' or 'have a bike'. 'travel to office' should be 'travel to work'. Also 'by this' is unclear; use 'by them' (referring to bikes) or 'by bike'. The sentence also benefits from a clearer conjunction: 'because' rather than 'as' in spoken explanation. Suggestion: Use plural nouns with quantifiers and correct articles: 'many middle-class people have bikes and they travel to work or school by bike.'

× So it's common in Pakistan uh, as my country, Pakistan, so it's common in here.

✓ So it's common in my country, Pakistan.

The original repeats the idea and uses 'in here' which is awkward; use 'in my country' or simply 'in Pakistan'. Also avoid redundant phrasing 'as my country, Pakistan'. Keep it concise: 'So it's common in my country, Pakistan.' Suggestion: Remove repetition and use correct prepositional phrase 'in my country'.