Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details. Avoid fillers (umm) and tense/word choice errors (use 'rode' or 'would ride' instead of 'ride' for past habitual). Mention a brief reason or memory to enrich the answer.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red UMM bike made by Giant, and I used to ride it every March break and during school holidays. I remember racing my friends down the park path because it was light and easy to handle.

提案: Organize your response with a clear topic sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because' and 'furthermore'). Remove fillers, correct collocations ('economical' not 'economic friendly') and vocabulary ('public transport' not 'public transportations'). Keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming more popular. Many people choose cycling because it is more economical and often faster for short trips. Furthermore, cycling is good for relaxation and lets riders enjoy local scenery, especially in cities with bike lanes.

× Yes I did, I used to have a red UMM bike which is from Giant and I always ride this bike UMM during my March break and holidays.

✓ Yes I did. I used to have a red UMM bike made by Giant and I always rode this bike during my March breaks and holidays.

The sentence refers to past habitual actions, so verbs should be in the past tense. 'Used to have' is correct, but 'which is from Giant' should be 'made by Giant' and in past reference 'was made by' could be used; 'made by Giant' is natural. 'I always ride' should be 'I always rode' to match past time frame. Also split into two sentences for clarity and remove filler 'UMM'. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense when describing past habits and avoid filler words.

× Yes, I believe so umm more and more people are trying to ride bike instead of umm, taking trans uh, public transportations or drive by themselves, because uh, taking bike is more economic friendly and also can help us to uh, relax, see the views umm, around during, during writing.

✓ Yes, I believe so. More and more people are trying to ride bikes instead of taking public transport or driving by themselves, because riding a bike is more economical and can also help us relax and see the views around while riding.

Multiple errors: 'ride bike' needs plural or article -> 'ride bikes' or 'ride a bike'. 'Public transportations' is incorrect; 'public transport' or 'public transportation' (uncountable) is correct. 'Drive by themselves' should be 'driving by themselves' to match gerund structure after 'instead of'. 'Taking bike' should be 'riding a bike' and 'economic friendly' is incorrect adjective/adverb choice; use 'economical' or 'more environmentally/economically friendly' depending on meaning. 'Can also help us to uh, relax, see the views umm, around during, during writing' has word choice and redundancy issues: use 'help us relax and see the views around while riding'. Remove fillers and ensure verb forms agree with subjects and parallel structure is maintained. Suggestion: use plural forms for general activities, use gerunds after 'instead of', and choose correct adjective forms.