Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, accurate and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I had a bike as a child.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using correct verbs and linking words. Correct key grammar errors (e.g. use ‘ride’ not ‘write’; use past simple consistently). Keep responses natural and concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it at about five or six years old, and my brother taught me how to balance and pedal. I remember feeling very excited the first time I rode without training wheels.

提案: Answer directly, then give a clear reason with correct vocabulary and linking words. Use accurate verbs and collocations (e.g. ‘popular’, ‘use public transport’). Avoid fragmented sentences and maintain coherence with words like ‘because’ or ‘however’.

例: Not really — bikes are not very popular where I live. Because I live in the city, most people prefer to use public transport or cars, so cycling is uncommon for daily travel.

× Yes I did on a bike as long as I remember.

✓ Yes, I did. I have ridden a bike for as long as I can remember.

The original mixes past simple and incorrect phrasing. 'Yes I did on a bike' is ungrammatical. Use 'I did' to answer the question and then a correct statement: present perfect 'have ridden' expresses experience continuing to now: 'for as long as I can remember' is the idiomatic expression. Also add commas and proper punctuation.

× I'm the age of 5 to 6 and my brother taught me how to write it when I feel excited for the first time learning how to ride a bike.

✓ I was about five or six years old when my brother taught me how to ride it; I remember feeling excited the first time I learned.

Problems: wrong pronoun and verb ('I'm the age of 5 to 6' should be 'I was about five or six years old'); 'write it' is incorrect word choice—should be 'ride it'; tense consistency: use past 'was','taught','felt','learned' because the event is in the past. Rephrase for clarity and natural English. Use numerals written as words for small ages.

× For the time I think bikes not that popular in our country because I live in the city.

✓ At the moment, I think bikes are not very popular in our country because I live in the city.

Errors: 'For the time' is unnatural—use 'At the moment' or 'Nowadays'. Missing auxiliary verb for negation: 'bikes not that popular' must be 'bikes are not that popular' (subject-verb agreement and negation). 'Very' is a better collocation than 'that' in this context. Maintain present simple for general truth.

× And everyone is writing a public transportation when we go out.

✓ And everyone uses public transportation when we go out.

'Writing a public transportation' is incorrect verb choice and structure. Use 'uses' (present simple) because it's a habitual action: 'everyone uses public transportation when we go out.' Also remove the article 'a' before 'public transportation' because 'public transportation' is an uncountable noun in this context. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'everyone uses'.