Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g., "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child."). Correct past-tense verbs and articles ("I had a bike," not "I have a bag" or "when I was child"). Remove filler words and repetition, and provide one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example: "because", "so", "also"). Keep the answer concise (no more than 4–5 sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it because I often had nothing else to do, so I would ride around my neighborhood for hours. Also, I used to race my friends on weekends, which made cycling fun and social.

提案: Make the response more natural and structured. Begin with a direct statement ("Yes, bikes are popular in my city/country."). Use correct tense and clearer phrasing to explain reasons, and use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., "because", "since", "as a result"). Avoid repetition and give a specific example or brief detail about how people use bikes. Keep answers concise and grammatically correct.

例: Yes, bikes have become very popular in my city, especially since 2020. During the COVID pandemic many people started cycling for exercise and safe outdoor activities, so bike sales increased a lot. For example, my neighbors formed a small cycling group and they ride together every evening.

× Actually, I have a bag when I was child.

✓ Actually, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used 'have' (present) while referring to the past and used incorrect noun 'bag' instead of 'bike' from the question; also missing article before 'child'. Use past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a child' and include the article 'a'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past time references and check noun choice and articles.'

× Uh, I really like, I really like, uh, I really like bike because I don't have any something to do, so I just going around and do the bike.

✓ Uh, I really liked bikes because I didn't have anything to do, so I would just go around and ride my bike.

Multiple tense and form errors: the context refers to past habit, so use past simple 'liked' and 'didn't have'. 'Anything' is the correct negative pronoun, not 'any something'. 'Just going around' lacks an auxiliary—use 'would just go around' or 'just went around' for habitual past. 'Do the bike' is incorrect verb choice; use 'ride my bike'. Suggestion: Match tense to the time frame (past), use correct negation 'anything', use appropriate verbs ('go'/'ride') and possessive 'my' if referring to the student's bike.'

× Actually, bike is popular in my country in Medan, uh, because bike in 2020 in COVID, It's a trend.

✓ Actually, bikes are popular in my city, Medan, because during COVID in 2020 they became a trend.

Errors: missing plural/article and wrong verb agreement. Use plural 'bikes' and plural verb 'are' for general statements. 'In my country in Medan' is awkward; use 'in my city, Medan'. Time expression 'in 2020 in COVID' should be 'during COVID in 2020'. Also use 'they became a trend' to express change in past. Suggestion: Use plural for general nouns, correct subject-verb agreement, and use natural time expressions like 'during' for periods.'

× It's a trend. It's a trend. So it's a trend. Like people, many, many people buy a buy a bike so they can walking around with their friend.

✓ Many people bought bikes so they could walk around with their friends.

Multiple issues: repetition aside, tense should be past 'bought' to match 2020 reference. 'Buy a buy a bike' is a repetition and incorrect. 'So they can walking' mixes modal and -ing form; after 'could' use base verb 'walk' (or 'walk around') or 'could walk around'. Also 'their friend' should be plural 'their friends' when referring to many people. Suggestion: Use past tense for past events, avoid repetition, use correct verb forms after modal verbs, and match plurality of nouns/pronouns.