Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct and natural, but it is very short and misses opportunity to add a brief detail to make it more engaging. To improve, add one or two specific supporting details (reason or brief context) and use a linking phrase if needed. Keep it within 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family lived in a very hilly area, so walking was easier. However, I often borrowed my neighbour's bike to go to the park.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives reasons, but it contains hesitation and a small repetition. To improve clarity and coherence, remove fillers (uh), avoid repeating phrases, and use a linking word to connect your points (for example, “and” or “moreover”). Add one specific example or statistic if possible to strengthen your point.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are a convenient and inexpensive way to commute. Moreover, many people ride them for leisure — for instance, weekend cycling groups are common in my city.

× I think bikes are definitely popular in my country because it is very it is a very convenient and inexpensive way to get around, and people grow up riding them for fun as well.

✓ I think bikes are definitely popular in my country because they are a very convenient and inexpensive way to get around, and people grow up riding them for fun as well.

The sentence uses 'it is' incorrectly to refer to 'bikes', a plural noun. This is a subject-pronoun agreement error (present tense reference). Replace 'it is' with 'they are' so the pronoun agrees in number with 'bikes'. Also remove the duplicated phrase 'it is' for fluency. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns agree with their antecedents in number (singular/plural) and read sentences aloud to catch repeated words.

× So, uh, many people keep cycling as a hobby or for short commutes.

✓ So, uh, many people keep cycling as a hobby or use them for short commutes.

The original sentence 'keep cycling' is grammatically acceptable, but 'keep cycling as a hobby or for short commutes' mixes structures awkwardly. The phrase 'use them for short commutes' is clearer because 'keep' + verb usually emphasizes continuing an activity; to parallel 'as a hobby' using 'use them' matches 'short commutes' as an object. This improves clarity and parallel structure. Suggestion: For parallelism, match grammatical structures in lists (e.g., 'as a hobby' pairs with 'for short commutes' or change to 'use them for short commutes').