Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear direct answer first, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep sentences short and natural, correct tense and grammar, and avoid redundancy. For example, start with "Yes, I did" and then explain why your parents allowed it and one specific benefit you remember. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

例: Yes, I did. My parents allowed me to ride a bike because they thought it was good exercise. As a result, I had more energy and spent less time watching TV when I was young.

提案: Answer directly (e.g., "Yes, they are") then give clear, specific reasons with linking words. Correct common grammar issues (comparative forms, articles, word choice) and avoid vague phrases like "more ternold". Provide one or two concrete examples or times when people ride bikes to support your point.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many people cycle in the evenings and sometimes in the mornings because it improves fitness and reduces stress. For example, my neighbors usually go for a 30-minute bike ride after work to stay active and cut down screen time.

× Childhood because it is allowed by my parents and my parents believe that if a child ride a bike, it is beneficial for their health as well As for their energy and productivity level so I call. Please try to ride bike when I was young.

✓ I had a bike in my childhood because my parents allowed it and believed that if a child rides a bike, it is beneficial for their health, energy, and productivity, so I tried to ride a bike when I was young.

This sentence has multiple sentence structure and verb agreement issues. Errors include an incomplete opening word 'Childhood' (sentence fragment), incorrect verb forms 'is allowed' (should be past tense 'allowed'), subject-verb disagreement 'a child ride' (should be 'a child rides'), awkward clauses and punctuation. Suggestions: begin with a complete subject and past-tense verb for a past situation, use 'allowed' not 'is allowed', use third person singular present 'rides' in general statements, combine clauses with commas and conjunctions, and replace 'I call. Please try to ride bike' with the past action 'I tried to ride a bike'. Use articles before 'bike' and parallel nouns 'health, energy, and productivity'.

× Definitely yes, bikes are more ternold in my nation where all people prefer to ride in the evening sometime in morning because they find it is beneficial for their health as well as it makes them more happier as compared to other activities.

✓ Definitely yes, bikes are more popular in my country, where many people prefer to ride in the evening or sometimes in the morning because they find it beneficial for their health and it makes them happier compared to other activities.

Problems: incorrect word 'ternold' (wrong vocabulary), awkward comparison 'more ternold' and unnecessary 'are' placement. 'all people' is too absolute; use 'many people'. 'sometime in morning' needs article and pluralization 'sometimes in the morning'. 'it is beneficial for their health as well as it makes them more happier' is redundant and has double comparative 'more happier' (incorrect). Suggestions: use correct adjective 'popular', use 'many people', use 'sometimes in the morning', remove redundant 'more' before 'happier', and keep parallel structure: 'beneficial for their health and makes them happier'.

× All in all it reduced their screen time as well.

✓ All in all, it reduced their screen time as well.

The main issue is punctuation and clarity rather than verb form; however the past tense 'reduced' correctly describes a past effect. Add a comma after the introductory phrase 'All in all' for proper sentence structure. Suggestion: include the comma and ensure context makes clear the subject 'it' refers to cycling; the tense is correct for a past reduction.