Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is direct but too short and lacks detail. To improve, give a brief topic sentence and add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, how you used it, a short memory). Use a linking word to connect ideas and keep the response to no more than 3–4 sentences to remain natural and concise.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bicycle with training wheels that I used to ride around my neighborhood every day. Because the area was safe and close to school, I often rode it with my friends after classes.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has several problems: unclear phrasing, repetition, grammar errors, and an unfinished final sentence. To improve, start with a clear topic sentence, then use 2–3 specific supporting points (e.g., narrow streets, low car ownership, affordable transport), connect ideas with linking words (for example, because, therefore, consequently), and finish with a concise concluding statement. Also correct grammar (e.g., "it's comfortable" → "it's more convenient") and avoid redundant sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Because many streets are narrow and public transport is limited, people often find bicycles more convenient and faster than cars. As a result, many students and workers cycle to school or the office every day.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because there's a country where you move around with the bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because it is common to travel by bike.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'there's a country' which is meaningless here and misuses the 'there be' construction. Replace with a clea r subject 'it' and the phrase 'common to travel by bike' to convey the intended idea. Suggestion: Use 'there is/there are' only to state existence; use 'it is common' to describe general habits.

× You hardly use a car because the roads are very narrow.

✓ People hardly use cars because the roads are very narrow.

The original uses 'you' which generalizes awkwardly in this context. Also 'a car' is too specific; use the plural 'cars' to refer to the general mode of transport. Suggestion: Use 'people' or 'people in my country' and plural nouns for general statements.

× So the bike might take comfortable to move around the city to go to school, to go to work.

✓ So a bike can make it comfortable to get around the city, whether going to school or work.

The phrase 'take comfortable' is ungrammatical. Use a verb like 'make' and the adjective 'comfortable' with an object ('it') or restructure the sentence. Also use 'a bike' or 'bikes' consistently and 'get around' is a natural phrasal verb. Suggestion: Use 'make it + adjective' to describe effect (make it comfortable).

× So bikes are actually very popular in the country.

✓ So bikes are actually very popular in my country.

The phrase 'in the country' is ambiguous; in this context, 'my country' is more appropriate. This is a clarity/structure problem rather than a verb issue. Suggestion: Keep references consistent (my country) when speaking about national habits.

× If you don't own a bike, it's very hard for you to.

✓ If you don't own a bike, it's very hard for you to get around.

The original sentence ends abruptly without a verb phrase, causing an incomplete sentence. Add 'get around' to complete the thought and match previous context. Suggestion: Ensure conditional clauses have a clear consequent verb phrase.