Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two concise supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms (had, bought) and word choice (bike). Limit to 2–4 sentences. For example, say who bought it, when you got it, and a simple description or why you liked it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me when I was about seven, and it was bright red, which made it my favorite. I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon, so I have many happy memories of it.

提案: Focus on clear statement and specific supporting reasons. Use correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement, and avoid unclear phrases. Start with a direct opinion, then add 1–2 specific reasons or comparisons using linking words like 'because' or 'however'. Keep it concise and coherent.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and to save money. However, when people grow older they often switch to motorbikes for longer journeys and greater speed.

× Yes I have a buy when I was trying my father buy it for me and really nice is have a red color.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me and it was really nice; it was red.

Errors: incorrect verb forms and noun choices ('have a buy' should be 'had a bike'), wrong tense for buying ('trying my father buy it' should be 'my father bought it'), and awkward phrasing for color. Type 9 applies because past participle/bare infinitive forms were used incorrectly and past simple is required to describe past events. Suggestion: use 'had' for possession in the past, 'bought' as the past tense of 'buy', and simple past constructions for past situations. Also use clear noun 'bike' and concise adjective phrases ('it was red').

× Yes, by very popular in my country everyone have it when the the world's shield, but when he when they grow up they use motorbike.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country; everyone has one when they are children, but when they grow up they use motorbikes.

Errors: subject-verb agreement ('everyone have' should be 'everyone has') and wrong demonstrative/pronoun use ('when he when they' is confused). Type 2 applies because third person singular agreement was incorrect. Also 'by very popular' is wrong word choice ('are very popular'). Suggestion: use 'are' with plural subject 'bikes', 'everyone has' for third person singular indefinite subject, maintain consistent plural 'motorbikes', and use 'when they are children' for clarity.