Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify tense and meaning, use a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and keep it concise. For example, say you had a bike and add one supporting detail. Avoid repetition and incorrect articles. Use linking only if adding detail.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was a red road bike that I used to ride to school and to visit friends on weekends.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using correct grammar and linking words. Avoid fillers (uh, um) and unclear phrases ("enjoy the IT"). Be more specific about why bikes are popular (cost, convenience, environment) and provide an example or brief comparison.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many people use bikes to commute to work or to market, which saves money on fuel and helps avoid traffic.

× Yes, I have a a bike to my child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Errors: incorrect tense (present 'have' vs past 'had') and extra article/word 'a a' and wrong phrase 'to my child'. Use past tense because question asks about childhood. Remove duplicate article and replace 'to my child' with 'when I was a child' to match meaning. Suggestion: Pay attention to time expressions in questions (when = past) and use past simple for completed past possession; proofread for repeated words.

× I think a bike is a popular in my country because my country is low income and every person in my country use uses bicycles and uh, when uh, we uh, ride a bike, we enjoy the IT.

✓ I think bicycles are popular in my country because it is a low-income country and almost everyone uses bicycles. Also, when we ride a bike, we enjoy it.

Multiple errors corrected according to list: (1) Singular/plural and article: 'a bike is a popular' is incorrect — use plural 'bicycles are popular' or 'a bike is popular' without extra 'the'. (2) Subject-verb agreement: 'every person ... use' should be 'uses'. (3) Article and noun phrase: 'my country is low income' is better phrased 'it is a low-income country'. (4) Redundancy and repetition removed ('my country' repeated). (5) Capitalization/word choice: 'the IT' is wrong; use lowercase 'it' referring to riding. Suggestions: Use plural when speaking generally, ensure verb agrees with singular subjects (every person + singular verb), hyphenate compound adjectives like 'low-income', avoid filler words 'uh' in responses, and keep pronoun references clear (use 'it' not 'the IT').