Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Speak with correct grammar and a clear topic sentence. Begin directly (e.g., “No, I didn’t have a motorbike when I was a child.”), use past tense consistently, avoid redundancy (bike vs bicycle), and keep it concise (1–3 sentences). Add one specific detail to make the answer more informative. Use linking words if giving extra information.

例: No, I didn’t have a motorbike when I was a child, but I did have a bicycle. I often rode it to school and to tuition classes, which was a quick and cheap way to travel around my neighborhood.

提案: Answer directly and avoid conversational fillers like “Why Sir?” Use a clear topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.”). Support with one or two specific reasons and a linking word (because/so/therefore). Maintain correct tense and natural phrasing, and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap to run and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use motorcycles to commute to markets or local shops, especially in crowded cities.

× So talking about my childhood, I doesn't have any bike but I have a bicycle and I used to ride on it whenever I need to go to school or tuition.

✓ So, talking about my childhood, I didn't have any bike, but I had a bicycle and I used to ride it whenever I needed to go to school or tuition.

Errors: 'doesn't have' is present tense third person singular form incorrectly used with first person past context; correct is 'didn't have' (past simple negative). 'I have a bicycle' should match past context as 'I had a bicycle.' 'used to ride on it' — 'ride' does not need the preposition 'on' when referring to bicycles; use 'ride it.' 'whenever I need' should be past tense 'needed' to match 'used to.' Suggestions: Use consistent past tense for childhood descriptions (didn't have, had, used to ride, needed). Remove unnecessary 'on' after 'ride.'

× Yes, of course. Why Sir? Quite popular in my country because whenever people want to travel for short distance, they used to travel by the bike.

✓ Yes, of course, they are quite popular in my country because whenever people want to travel a short distance, they usually travel by bike.

Errors: Sentence fragments and pronoun reference issues. 'Why Sir?' is unnecessary and awkward — better omitted. 'Quite popular in my country' lacks a subject; add 'they are' to refer to bikes. 'for short distance' needs an article: 'a short distance.' 'they used to travel by the bike' mixes habitual past 'used to' with present general statement; use present habitual 'usually travel.' Also 'by the bike' should be 'by bike' (no article). Suggestions: Include a clear subject ('they are'), use correct article 'a,' use present simple for general truths ('usually travel'), and drop 'the' before 'bike.'