Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly answer, then give one or two clear supporting details with correct grammar and fewer fillers. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") to make the reason clear. Avoid repetitions and unnecessary hesitations.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I preferred playing with dolls and spending time with my friends, because I wasn’t confident about riding and didn’t enjoy cycling.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and use linking words correctly. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "riding" instead of "writing") and remove repetitions. Mention a concrete example or reason to strengthen the answer.

例: Yes, bikes are becoming more popular in my country. In particular, more young women are learning to ride independently, which increasing their mobility and freedom in cities because cycling is cheaper and often faster than taking public transport.

× No, I never had a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The original uses 'never had' which is acceptable, but in a simple past negative context 'didn't have' is more natural. Use auxiliary 'did' + base verb for simple past negatives. Suggestion: say 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child.'

× Umm, I used to play with my dolls and uh, my friends and I, I had never been a good rider and I am not fond of cycling.

✓ I used to play with my dolls, and my friends and I used to play together. I was never a good rider, and I am not fond of cycling.

Multiple issues: run-on sentence and incorrect tense 'I had never been a good rider' (past perfect) is unnecessary; simple past 'I was never' fits because the time reference is past. Also repetition and sentence structure improved by splitting into clear clauses. Suggestion: use 'used to' for past habitual actions and 'was never' for a past state or ability.

× Yes, it's becoming very popular day by day.

✓ Yes, it is becoming more popular day by day.

Use 'it is' instead of contraction 'it's' if clarity desired; original also says 'very popular day by day' which is awkward—'more popular day by day' or 'increasingly popular' is better to express gradual increase. Tense present continuous 'is becoming' correctly shows ongoing change.

× And the positive thing is that it's it's popularity is increasing among young girls and women and they they are becoming more independent by writing their bikes on their own.

✓ The positive thing is that its popularity is increasing among young girls and women, and they are becoming more independent by riding their bikes on their own.

Errors: repeated words ('it's it's', 'they they'); incorrect use of contraction 'it's' with possessive—should be 'its' (possessive pronoun). 'Writing' is a typo; correct verb is 'riding'. Also sentence was long; adding a comma improves clarity. Suggestion: remove duplicates, use 'its' for possession, and use 'riding' for cycling.