Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and provide a brief reason or detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one short supporting detail. Avoid single-word fillers and contractions are fine but keep it smooth. For example, mention who used the scooty or why you had it.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child; I used a scooty instead because it was easier to handle on city streets. Also, my parents preferred a scooty for short errands, so I learned to ride that early on.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear topic sentence, use linking words, avoid repetition and hesitations, and give one or two specific reasons. Use correct comparative forms and subject-verb agreement. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they generally have better fuel efficiency than scooters. As a result, many people prefer bikes for longer commutes and cost savings on petrol.

× No, I didn't have a bike, I had scooty.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike; I had a scooty.

The noun 'scooty' (a colloquial term for a scooter) should be used with an article when singular: 'a scooty'. Also punctuation is improved for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a scooter' for more standard English: 'I had a scooter.'

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because uh, the mileage of bike is good uh, the mileage of bike is good than scooter, scooter.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because the mileage of bikes is good; the mileage of bikes is better than that of scooters.

Article and noun number errors: use 'the mileage of bikes' (or 'bikes' plural) and comparative form 'better than'. Also when comparing, include 'that of' to refer back to 'scooters'. Suggestions: simplify: '...because bikes have better mileage than scooters.'

× So that's why people uh prefers bike rather than scooty.

✓ So that's why people prefer bikes rather than scooties.

Subject 'people' is plural so the verb should be 'prefer' not 'prefers'. Also use plural nouns when speaking generally: 'bikes' and 'scooters' (or 'scooties' colloquially). Better: 'So that's why people prefer bikes to scooters.'