Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer concise, grammatically correct and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and word order (e.g. "I had" not "I had a bike that was red and small bike"). Avoid redundancy (don’t repeat "bike").

例: Yes, I had a small red bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day to explore my neighbourhood, and I remember using it to visit friends and run small errands. It was my main way of getting around, so I became quite confident on two wheels.

提案: Provide a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Use correct vocabulary ("motorbikes" or "bicycles", "environmentally friendly") and complete sentences. Fix grammar (e.g. "Almost every child has their own bike") and avoid fragmented sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use motorbikes for daily travel because they are affordable and convenient; meanwhile, bicycles are common among children and for short trips because they are environmentally friendly and inexpensive.

× Yes I had a bike that was red and small bike but that times I used to almost every day to around to work to ride around my neighborhood.

✓ Yes, I had a small red bike, and at that time I used to ride it almost every day around my neighborhood.

Original sentence has past-tense context but contains word order errors, extra words, and incorrect phrase choices. 'that times' should be 'at that time'; 'small bike' repeats 'bike' unnecessarily; 'used to almost every day to around to work to ride around' is jumbled. Correct by using past habitual 'used to ride', proper adverb placement 'almost every day', and correct word order 'small red bike'. Use commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: Practice forming past habitual sentences with 'used to + base verb' and placing adverbs (almost every day) before the location phrase (around my neighborhood).

× Gas bikes are really common in my country.

✓ Gas-powered bikes are very common in my country.

'Gas bikes' is informal and ambiguous; 'gas-powered' is the correct adjective. 'Really' is acceptable but 'very' is more natural here. Ensure compound adjectives use hyphen when placed before a noun (gas-powered).

× Almost every child has own bikes.

✓ Almost every child has their own bike.

'Almost every child' is singular, so the possessive should be singular too: 'their' as a gender-neutral singular possessive is acceptable, and 'bike' should be singular to match 'every child'. 'Own' needs a determiner 'their own'. Suggestion: When the subject uses 'every', treat it as singular and match verbs/nouns accordingly.

× Are used not only to explore neighborhood but also that environmental friendly vehicle to explore.

✓ Bikes are used not only to explore neighborhoods but also as environmentally friendly vehicles.

Original fragment lacks a clear subject and verb structure and misuses 'that' and word forms. Start with subject 'Bikes are used' (passive), use parallel structure 'not only... but also', plural 'neighborhoods' or 'the neighborhood', and correct adjective/adverb forms: 'environmentally friendly' (adverb + adjective) and plural 'vehicles' to match general statement. Use 'as' to indicate function. Suggestion: Use parallel structure for 'not only... but also' and ensure correct adjective/adverb forms ('environmentally friendly').