Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и грамотно: используйте одно завершённое предложение, чтобы прямо ответить на вопрос, затем добавьте одно-два поддерживающих предложения с конкретикой (возраст, кто подарил, как часто ездили). Избегайте разрывов и лишних пауз, объединяйте части с помощью корректных грамматических конструкций (например, present perfect vs. past simple).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding it when I was six, and I used to cycle to school almost every day.

提案: Дайте более организованный и связный ответ: начните с чёткого утверждения, затем приведите 2–3 конкретных причин или примера. Используйте связки (for example, because, therefore) и избегайте разговорных вставок («uh», «'cause so»). Также поясните, что вы имеете в виду под «emerging» с конкретным примером.

例: Yes, I think bikes are becoming very popular in my country. For example, many people use them for commuting because they are cheaper and faster in traffic, and cities are adding more bike lanes to encourage cycling.

× I had a bike when I was a child and I have been. Riding a bike since six years old.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child and I have been riding a bike since I was six years old.

The original contains a sentence fragment and incorrect tense sequence. 'I have been. Riding' separates the present perfect continuous into two parts and creates a fragment. Also 'since six years old' is incorrect; 'since' requires a point in time (since I was six) or use 'for' with a duration (for six years). Correct form: 'I have been riding a bike since I was six years old.' This keeps the present perfect continuous for an action continuing from the past to the present and provides a proper time expression. Suggestion: Use 'I have been riding' as one continuous verb phrase and 'since I was six years old' as the time reference.

× Yes, 'cause so I see a lot of people that are riding a bike right now and uh, it's like emerging type of our lives that uh, cannot be replaced by other vehicle.

✓ Yes, because I see a lot of people riding bikes right now, and it's becoming an important part of our lives that cannot be replaced by other vehicles.

Multiple issues: ' 'cause so' is colloquial and redundant; use 'because' or 'since'. 'people that are riding a bike' is wordy and uses 'that' for people; better: 'people riding bikes'. 'riding a bike' should be plural 'riding bikes' to match 'a lot of people'. 'it's like emerging type of our lives' is ungrammatical — use 'it's becoming an important part of our lives' to express increasing popularity. 'other vehicle' needs plural 'other vehicles'. Also verb tense 'are riding' is acceptable for present continuous but simpler 'riding' is natural. Suggestions: avoid filler words 'uh', avoid overly colloquial contractions in formal responses, match plural/singular nouns, and use clear vocabulary like 'becoming' and 'important part'.