Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant with a good story structure, but make small grammar corrections and tighten phrasing to sound more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct articles and verb forms (‘when I was a child’), and avoid small redundancies. Add one linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly and keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. My brother had a mountain bike that inspired me, so when I was about five I got a small four‑wheeled bicycle from my parents. After a while I removed the extra wheels and learned to ride on my own.

提案: Your answer gives a clear opinion and reason, but combine short fragments into full sentences and use linking words for coherence. Replace the sentence fragment ‘Because of the poor infrastructure’ with a connected clause and add a specific example or consequence to make your point more concrete.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Turkey, especially in large cities, because the infrastructure is poor. For example, there are few dedicated bike lanes and heavy traffic, which discourages many people from cycling to work or school.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Missing the article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. In English, singular countable nouns usually need an article or determiner. Add 'a' to make it grammatically correct. Suggestion: use 'a child' or 'a kid' in similar contexts.

× Because of the poor infrastructure.

✓ Because of the poor infrastructure, people are discouraged from cycling.

This fragment begins with a subordinate clause but lacks a main clause, making it a sentence fragment. Also original sentence later uses an incorrect verb pattern. Combine with a main clause and use correct verb pattern 'be discouraged from doing something'. Suggestion: attach the clause to a complete sentence and use 'discouraged from cycling'.

× There are few dedicated bike lanes around cities, which discourages people to cycle.

✓ There are few dedicated bike lanes around cities, which discourages people from cycling.

The verb 'discourage' is followed by the preposition 'from' + gerund, not 'to' + infinitive. Also 'cycling' (gerund) is required. Replace 'to cycle' with 'from cycling' to fix the preposition and verb form error.