Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct the grammar and be more specific. Start with a clear topic sentence that uses past tense (e.g., "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child."), then add one or two supporting details (where you rode it, how often, or a brief memory). Use linking words like "and" or "often" to make it coherent and keep the answer to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, and it was my main way to visit friends after school. I especially remember learning to ride on a small hill near my house, which made me feel independent.

提案: Give a direct opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Use linking words such as "because", "for example" or "so" properly, and maintain natural sentence structure. Aim for 2–3 sentences: one topic sentence stating your view, and one supporting sentence explaining why with a concrete example (e.g., traffic, cost, or health benefits).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because they help people avoid traffic and are inexpensive to use. For example, many commuters ride bikes to the metro station to save time and money during rush hour.

× Yes, I have a vibe when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The student used present tense 'have' with a past time reference 'when I was a child', so the verb should be past tense 'had'. Also 'vibe' is incorrect word choice for 'bike' and the article 'a' is needed before 'child'. Suggestion: use 'had' for past possession and 'a child' as correct noun phrase.

× Because it saves time for transportation.

✓ Yes, because it saves time when traveling.

This fragment begins with 'Because' and lacks a main clause; also 'for transportation' is awkward. The response should be a complete sentence matching the question. Suggestion: include an introductory 'Yes,' and use 'when traveling' or 'for transportation' rephrased to fit the sentence.

× Feels very much fine.

✓ It feels very convenient.

The original uses an incorrect impersonal verb form and awkward adverb placement 'very much fine'. English prefers 'It feels' or 'They are' and a suitable adjective like 'convenient' or 'good'. Suggestion: use 'It feels very convenient' or 'They are very convenient' to convey meaning clearly.