Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện tính tự nhiên và cấu trúc câu: tránh trả lời chỉ bằng "Yes" rồi lặp lại thông tin không chính xác. Nên trả lời trực tiếp, dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn, ngữ pháp đúng (ví dụ: "I'm an eleventh‑grade student"). Có thể thêm một cụm thông tin ngắn để mở rộng nhưng không quá 2–3 câu.

例: I'm an eleventh‑grade student at a local high school. I study science subjects mainly, and I'm preparing for university entrance exams this year.

提案: Cải thiện thứ tự từ và ngữ pháp, tách câu rõ ràng và dùng liên từ để nối ý. Tránh dịch sát từ tiếng Việt; hãy nói rõ tên loại trường, vị trí và mô tả ngắn gọn bằng câu hoàn chỉnh (max 3 câu).

例: I study at Function High School in the northern province of Phu Tho. It's located in a peaceful, rural area surrounded by greenery, which makes it a pleasant place to learn.

提案: Làm rõ lý do cụ thể hơn bằng cách nêu ví dụ: cơ sở vật chất, đội ngũ giáo viên, hoặc môi trường học tập. Dùng liên từ như "because" hoặc "because of" và giữ câu ngắn gọn, tự nhiên.

例: Yes, I think it's a good place to study because the teachers are supportive and the classes match my level. For example, we have small class sizes which make it easier to ask questions.

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và từ vựng chuyên môn: dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng (I would like the school to...), sửa lỗi từ (e.g., "implement a few changes", "comfortable seating", "better natural lighting"), và cung cấp một hoặc hai thay đổi cụ thể với lý do rõ ràng.

例: Yes, I'd like the school to make a few changes to improve the learning environment. For instance, adding more quiet study areas with comfortable seating and improving natural lighting would help students concentrate during long study sessions.

提案: Câu trả lời tốt nhưng cần chỉnh một vài điểm ngữ pháp và rút gọn để tự nhiên hơn: dùng "a master's degree" và câu ngắn gọn, có thể nêu một mục tiêu cụ thể (ví dụ: nghiên cứu về bảo tồn hoặc giảm thiểu rủi ro khí hậu). Giữ 2–3 câu tối đa.

例: In the near future, I plan to pursue a master's degree in environmental science to deepen my knowledge of sustainable development and climate change. I'd like to join a program with strong research opportunities and practical fieldwork, possibly focusing on ecosystem conservation.

× Yes I am a student.

✓ Yes, I am a student.

Missing comma after introductory interjection; not a pronoun error but punctuation; add comma. Suggestion: use 'Yes, I am a student.'

× I am in eleven grade class.

✓ I am in the eleventh grade.

Use ordinal form for grade levels and omit 'class'. In English 'eleventh grade' is singular and uses ordinal 'eleventh'. Suggestion: use 'I am in the eleventh grade.'

× Study in function High school my school located in.

✓ I study at Function High School; my school is located in...

Original lacks subject and proper word order. Use subject 'I' plus verb 'study' and preposition 'at' for institutions. Also use 'is located' for location. Suggestion: 'I study at Function High School; my school is located in...'

× Located in full Top province in northern Vietnam, it is a quiet and beautiful place.

✓ It is located in Full Top Province in northern Vietnam; it is a quiet and beautiful place.

Misplaced participial phrase and wrong preposition usage. Begin with subject 'It' and use 'located in' plus proper place name; capitalize proper nouns. Suggestion: 'It is located in Full Top Province in northern Vietnam; it is a quiet and beautiful place.'

× Yes, I good line my study place to implement a few change to improve the learning environment.

✓ Yes, I would like my study place to implement a few changes to improve the learning environment.

Multiple errors: incorrect expression 'good line' and wrong verb/modal. Use conditional/modal 'would like' to express desire, plural 'changes', and 'study place' could be 'school' or 'study place'. Suggestion: 'Yes, I would like my school to implement a few changes to improve the learning environment.'

× For instance, introduce more feasible study space with comfortable seating and better naturalizing would make long studies.

✓ For instance, introducing more feasible study spaces with comfortable seating and better natural lighting would make long study sessions easier.

Use gerund 'introducing' after 'For instance,' plural 'spaces', 'natural lighting' is correct term not 'naturalizing', and 'study sessions' clarifies 'long studies'. Suggestion: 'For instance, introducing more feasible study spaces with comfortable seating and better natural lighting would make long study sessions easier.'

× In the near future, I plan to pursue a master degree in environmental science to deepen my understanding of sustainable development and climate change, especially aim to enroll in a program that offers strong research opportunities and practical field work.

✓ In the near future, I plan to pursue a master's degree in Environmental Science to deepen my understanding of sustainable development and climate change; I especially aim to enroll in a program that offers strong research opportunities and practical fieldwork.

Use possessive form 'master's degree' and capitalize proper noun 'Environmental Science'. Sentence needed subject 'I' before 'especially aim' and 'fieldwork' is one word. Suggestion: 'In the near future, I plan to pursue a master's degree in Environmental Science to deepen my understanding of sustainable development and climate change; I especially aim to enroll in a program that offers strong research opportunities and practical fieldwork.'