Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子结构混乱，有语法错误（例如冠词和时态），表达重复且略显冗长。应直接开门见山说明身份，然后用1–2个简洁具体的原因支持。注意冠词（a/an/the）、时态和词序，避免模糊词如“maybe someday”放在句末显得不确定。

例: I'm a student at the University of New South Wales, majoring in Journalism and Communication. I chose this major because I'm fascinated by how social media works and I hope to start my own media company in the future.

提案: 回答含混、不连贯并有多处词汇和语法错误（如University name错误、冗余短语、不完整句子）。应先给出正确校名，再用一到两句具体描述学习生活（例如课程类型、学习任务），并用连词使句子流畅。避免插入多余短语。

例: I study at the University of New South Wales. My course includes lectures and tutorials in journalism, and I spend a lot of time editing articles and doing practical projects, which I find challenging but rewarding.

提案: 总体意思清楚但有语法和词汇错误（例如“already benefit to study”,”Staffs”）。可以用更自然的表达替换并加入具体例子（如图书馆、实验室、咨询服务），用连词连接观点。保持句子简洁。

例: Yes, it's a great place to study. The campus has excellent facilities like a large library and modern media labs, and the staff and teachers are very supportive, offering helpful feedback and tutoring.

提案: 答案重复之前内容且有语法错误（主谓不一致、词形错误）。即便想表达不需要改变，也应简洁说明原因並可提一处改进意見以显得更自然（如更多实习机会）。使用连贯词提高表达逻辑。

例: I don't think major changes are necessary because the facilities and support meet my needs. However, I would welcome more industry internships to help students gain practical experience.

提案: 回答含糊且语法混乱，难以理解意图。应明确列出具体计划（如完成研究生课程、取得优良成绩、学习特定技能或语言），用清晰的句子和逻辑连接词。避免不相关或不明确的短语。

例: My plan is to complete my postgraduate degree with strong grades and then improve my professional skills, especially my English proficiency. After graduation I would also look for internships in media companies to gain practical experience.

× I am a currently student studying at the NSW University majoring in Journalism and Communication.

✓ I am currently a student studying at NSW University, majoring in Journalism and Communication.

句子中“a currently student”词序错误。冠词“a”应放在可数名词前，而副词“currently”应放在冠词之后或动词前。建议把副词放在冠词之后或主语之后，形成“I am currently a student”。此外“the NSW University”去掉冠词“the”更自然。

× I choose this field because I have been interested in understanding how the social media operate and I want to build my own company, maybe someday.

✓ I chose this field because I have been interested in understanding how social media operate, and I want to build my own company someday.

此句时态和动词形式不一致：与“have been interested”连用时，通常用过去分词或过去时态说明选择原因，用“chose”更符合语境。去掉定冠词“the”更自然；将“maybe someday”改为“someday”更简洁。

× Umm I study at the University of New Southwest, which is the most famous the university in Australia in my daily life now, including the editing, the lecture and tutorials, studying altars and taking a job.

✓ I study at the University of New South Wales, which is one of the most famous universities in Australia. In my daily life there I do editing, attend lectures and tutorials, study at the library, and have a job.

原句中有多处冠词和名词单复数错误：“the most famous the university”冗余且错误，应为“one of the most famous universities”；“New Southwest”应为“New South Wales”；“the lecture and tutorials”应为“lectures and tutorials”；“studying altars”可能是“study at the library”的错误表达。建议整理为清晰的几句话并修正单复数与冠词。

× I think this is challenging yet regarding because they provide me with new the knowledge and the.

✓ I think this is challenging but rewarding because they provide me with new knowledge.

句子中“challenging yet regarding”用词错误，应该是“challenging but rewarding”。“new the knowledge and the.”有冗余冠词且句子未完，去掉多余的“the”并简化为“new knowledge”。

× Yes, I think it's a good place because the current facilities can meet my needs and the environment is already benefit to study and learning.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good place because the current facilities meet my needs and the environment is already beneficial for studying and learning.

“the current facilities can meet my needs”时态可以更简洁为“meet”；“the environment is already benefit to study and learning”中“benefit”用错词性，应为形容词“beneficial”，且搭配为“beneficial for/of/ to doing”，此处用“for studying and learning”。

× Also the Staffs and the teachers are very supportive and helpful.

✓ Also the staff and the teachers are very supportive and helpful.

“Staffs”作为集体名词通常不可数或使用“staff members”；因此应使用“staff”或“staff members”。保留“the teachers”或可并列为“staff and teachers”。

× No, I don't believe the school have make any changes because the current facilities can meet my needs and the environment is already benefit to study and learning.

✓ No, I don't believe the school has made any changes because the current facilities meet my needs and the environment is already beneficial for studying and learning.

主语“the school”是单数，谓语应为“has made”而不是“have make”；同时“have make”是动词形式错误，应为完成时的过去分词“made”。“benefit”应改为形容词“beneficial”，并调整动名词用法。

× Also the Staffs and teachers are very supportive and helpful.

✓ Also the staff and the teachers are very supportive and helpful.

同上，重复句中“Staffs”应为不可数名词“staff”或复数短语“staff members”。保持统一大小写，通常不大写“staff”。

× The balance between the academic and entertainments is perfect.

✓ The balance between academics and entertainment is perfect.

“the academic and entertainments”搭配错误。应使用不可数形式“academics”或“academic life”表示学术，和不可数名词“entertainment”。去掉多余冠词，使短语语义正确。

× In the future I think my study plan is continue to finish my the post graduate studying and have a good mark to graduate and also if this time the L taste is winning and get a high score, I will not to maybe learn the artist but I will continue to learn English.

✓ In the future I plan to continue and finish my postgraduate studies and graduate with good grades. If I get a high score this time, I may not learn art, but I will continue to study English.

原句时态混乱且词序与词形错误：“is continue to finish my the post graduate studying”应为“plan to continue and finish my postgraduate studies”；“have a good mark to graduate”应为“graduate with good grades”；“I will not to maybe learn the artist”结构错误且用词不当，改为“I may not learn art”。建议使用简洁明确的将来计划表达。