Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (verb tense and subject-verb agreement) and make the answer slightly more concise while keeping it natural. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "actually" and "to be honest" are unnecessary).

例: I’m currently taking a gap year to gain real-life experience. For example, I’m volunteering at a local charity and doing short internships, which help me explore different career options.

提案: Correct the program name (use consistent singular/plural) and make the response slightly more natural by adding a linking phrase to connect location and major. Keep it concise and factual.

例: I study at a large public university in Taoyuan, where I’m majoring in Industrial and Systems Engineering. The department has strong industry links, which gives students practical project opportunities.

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, and link supporting points with conjunctions or linking words. Avoid redundant words like "very wonderful"; use one strong adjective. Use full sentences and correct pronouns.

例: Yes, it’s a great place to study. For instance, it has a beautiful library for quiet study, and there are many affordable, tasty food options around campus, which is convenient for students.

提案: Be more specific about the problem and suggest a concrete improvement; use clearer grammar and linking words. Replace vague phrases like "improve the seat" with precise descriptions (e.g., "replace the chairs").

例: Yes, I would like them to improve the classroom seating because the current chairs are uncomfortable. For example, replacing old chairs with ergonomic seats would help students stay focused during long lectures.

提案: Make the goal more specific and add a brief reason or plan using a linking word. This makes the answer more informative and concrete. Avoid vague phrases like "advanced knowledge" without context.

例: I plan to study abroad to broaden my horizons and specialize in supply chain management. By studying at a university with strong industry ties, I hope to gain practical skills and international experience that will help my career.

× At the moment I'm actually taking a gap year. I decide to take some time off to explore different interests and gain some real life experience.

✓ At the moment I'm actually taking a gap year. I decided to take some time off to explore different interests and gain some real-life experience.

The second sentence uses 'decide' (simple present) but refers to a past decision that led to the current gap year, so past tense 'decided' is required (Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue). Also 'real life' should be hyphenated as 'real-life' when used as a compound adjective before 'experience'. Suggestion: Use past tense for past decisions and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I study at a large public university in Tao Yuan where I am majoring in Industrial and System Engineering.

✓ I study at a large public university in Tao Yuan where I am majoring in Industrial and Systems Engineering.

The program name 'Industrial and System Engineering' is unidiomatic; the correct usage is 'Industrial and Systems Engineering' (plural 'Systems') which is a fixed proper noun for the field (Grammar Problem Type 3: There be issue). Suggestion: Use the standard department name 'Industrial and Systems Engineering'.

× Yes, I say it's a very wonderful place to study there, have a beautiful library and also there's a lot of tasty food around the campus.

✓ Yes, I would say it's a wonderful place to study; it has a beautiful library and there is also a lot of tasty food around the campus.

Multiple issues: 'I say' is unnatural here; 'I would say' is more idiomatic. The original mixes clauses and omits subject 'it' before 'have' which causes a sentence fragment; include 'it has' for correct subject-verb structure (Grammar Problem Type 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Also replace 'there, have' with properly connected clauses. Suggestion: Use 'it has' to refer back to the university and restructure into complete sentences.

× Well, to be honest, I think the classroom can improve the seat because it's not very comfortable for us.

✓ Well, to be honest, I think the classrooms could improve the seating because it isn't very comfortable for us.

The singular 'classroom' and 'seat' are awkward when speaking generally about multiple classrooms and seating; use plural 'classrooms' and the uncountable noun 'seating' or plural 'seats'. Also 'can improve the seat' is unnatural; 'could improve the seating' is a better modal choice (Grammar Problem Type 14: Incorrect use of quantifiers). Suggestion: Use plurals or uncountable nouns to match general statements and adjust modal verb to 'could' for a polite suggestion.

× I want to study abroad to broaden my horizons and learn some advanced knowledge about my subjects.

✓ I want to study abroad to broaden my horizons and learn more advanced knowledge about my subjects.

The phrase 'learn some advanced knowledge' is unidiomatic; 'learn more advanced knowledge' or better 'gain more advanced knowledge' fits the present-tense desire (Grammar Problem Type 6: Present tense issue). Suggestion: Use 'gain' or 'learn more advanced material' to express acquiring knowledge.