Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and directly answer first, then add one or two clear supporting details. Avoid redundancy and grammar errors: use correct tense and articles, and simpler sentence structure. For example, start with “Neither; I’m a housewife” then add one reason or activity. Use linking word like “so” or “therefore” if needed.

例: Neither — I’m a housewife. I look after my family full-time, so I spend most of my day managing household tasks and caring for my children. I also try to use some free time for reading.

提案: Answer directly about where you studied, then give concise supporting details: course name, duration, and when you finished. Avoid sentence fragments and incorrect prepositions; say “I completed my master’s degree in Mathematics at Sardar Patel University” and combine related facts into one or two sentences.

例: I completed my master’s degree in Mathematics at Sardar Patel University. It was a two-year programme, and I finished it last year.

提案: Give a clear opinion with specific reasons and correct grammar. Avoid vague adjectives and incorrect word forms. Use linking words (for example, “because”, “also”) and give one or two concrete reasons, such as facilities or international students.

例: Yes, it is a very good place to study because it has experienced faculty and good library facilities. Also, many overseas students come here for postgraduate courses, which creates a diverse learning environment.

提案: Be direct: state whether you want changes, then give one specific reason. Avoid contradicting phrases (“Yes…I don't want changes”) and correct word order. Use linking words like “because” or “so”.

例: No, I would not like any changes because the institution is well managed and established. Therefore, I think its current systems and facilities are sufficient.

提案: Answer directly with your main plan, then give specific details about subject, possible university type or research focus. Correct phrases like “overseas university” and use linking words such as “and” or “so that”. Keep to two or three sentences.

例: In the future I want to pursue a PhD at an overseas university in mathematics. I plan to focus my research on algebraic topology so that I can specialise in one topic and contribute to academic research.

× Neither I am doing any work or study about something because nowadays I'm just a housewife keeping my family with me and spending much quality time together.

✓ I am not doing any work or studying at the moment because I am a housewife and I spend a lot of quality time with my family.

Pronoun and clause structure were incorrect: 'Neither I am doing' is wrong. Use negative form 'I am not doing' or 'Neither am I'. Also 'study about something' is incorrect; use 'studying' or 'studying anything'. 'Keeping my family with me' is unnatural; use 'I spend ... with my family'. Use present continuous 'am not doing' and 'am a housewife' to match current situation.

× I completed my master degree in Mathematics in Sardar Patel University.

✓ I completed my master's degree in Mathematics at Sardar Patel University.

Use possessive form 'master's degree' not 'master degree'. Use preposition 'at' for institutions. Past tense 'completed' is correct; change only noun phrase and preposition.

× Which is mainly 2 years story and I just completed it last year.

✓ It was a two-year programme, and I completed it last year.

Sentence began with 'Which' creating a fragment. Replace with full sentence 'It was a two-year programme'. Use hyphenated compound 'two-year' and 'programme' for clarity. Keep past tense 'was' and 'completed'.

× Yes of course it is a very good place to sur study and the many overseas students are come here to study their post graduation and further studies.

✓ Yes, of course it is a very good place to study, and many overseas students come here for postgraduate and further studies.

Remove typo 'sur'. 'Are come' is incorrect; use simple present 'come' for habitual action. 'Post graduation' should be 'postgraduate'. Use 'come here for' rather than 'come here to study their' for natural phrasing.

× Moreover, it is a very known able institute for studies.

✓ Moreover, it is a very well-known institute for higher education.

'Known able' is incorrect; correct collocation is 'well-known'. 'Institute for studies' is awkward; use 'institute for higher education' or 'a well-known institute'.

× Yes, I like the place where I study and I don't want to make any changes there.

✓ Yes, I like the place where I studied and I don't want any changes to be made there.

Tense should match earlier past study 'where I studied'. 'Make any changes there' is acceptable but passive 'changes to be made' is more natural here. Also avoid double tense confusion.

× So it is very settled and well managed into institution.

✓ It is a well-settled and well-managed institution.

'Into institution' is ungrammatical. Reorder adjectives before noun: 'well-settled and well-managed institution'. Use simple present 'is' for description.

× So I don't know think they can change anything.

✓ So I don't think they can change anything.

Extraneous 'know' creates an error. Use 'I don't think' for expressing opinion about possible changes.

× In future I want to pursue a PhD degree in overs university and also I want to learn many things about my main subject and I like to research more on one specific topic.

✓ In the future I want to pursue a PhD at a overseas university, and I also want to learn more about my main subject and do research on a specific topic.

Use article 'the' with 'future'. 'PhD degree' is redundant; 'pursue a PhD' is preferred. 'overs university' seems to mean 'overseas university'. Use 'learn more' not 'learn many things'. 'I like to research more' should be 'I want to do more research' to match future intention.