Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够直接且有语法错误，表达含混不清。建议直接以一句话回答问题，然后补充简短说明。例如：先说“I’m a student.” 然后说明年级或专业。注意语法和句子完整性，避免无意义的短语（如“will never say student in the Grade 1”）。

例: I’m a university student. I’m in my first year, studying English at a university in Beijing.

提案: 回答包含有效信息但措辞不准确，句子结构有些笨拙。建议先直接回答地点（city and institution），然后用一两句具体细节支持（如校园环境或系别）。使用连词使表达更连贯，并检查机构名称的准确性。

例: I study in Beijing at the Second English Language University. The campus is pleasant, with green courtyards and modern facilities that make studying comfortable.

提案: 回答积极但有重复和冗长，信息重复（学习努力、未来）没有紧扣“place”的评价。建议先给出直接评价（Yes, because...），然后用1–2个具体理由支持，比如师资、资源或学习氛围，避免与未来规划重复。

例: Yes, it’s a great place to study because the teachers are experienced and the classmates are supportive. For example, there are regular study groups and helpful tutors that improve my learning experience.

提案: 答案提到改进点但表达混乱，句子不连贯且信息堆砌（图书馆、专业选择、实验室、周末学习）。建议先明确提出一到两个具体改动（例如增加图书馆和实验室），然后用具体理由和影响说明。使用连词（for example, so that）连接观点。

例: Yes, I would like the school to expand its library and add more laboratories. For example, a larger library would provide more study space and resources, and extra labs would allow students to do experiments and study projects on weekends.

提案: 回答含糊且重复（多次提到“future”与“working hard”），没有具体计划。建议先给出明确计划（如攻读硕士、专业方向或技能提升），然后说明具体步骤或时间表，并用连词使逻辑清晰。

例: I plan to continue my studies by applying for a master’s program in Applied Linguistics after graduating. To prepare, I will improve my English proficiency, participate in research projects, and gain relevant internship experience over the next two years.

× Well I'm a student and will never say student in the Grade 1.

✓ Well, I'm a student and I was never a student in Grade 1.

句子结构混乱且时态不一致。原句中“will never say student in the Grade 1”语义不清，推测学生想表达“我在一年级时不是学生”或“我从未在一年级说我是学生”。根据上下文更合理的改写为过去时“I was never a student in Grade 1”。建议在句子中使用明确的主语和正确时态，并加上逗号改善流畅性。

× My school is in Beijing and the environment is very nice.

✓ My school is in Beijing, and the environment is very nice.

原句语法基本正确，但缺少逗号来连接两个独立分句以改善可读性。建议在并列句之间使用逗号。

× I study in the second English school university.

✓ I study at the Second English School of the University.

原句词序和搭配不正确。“study in”用于较大地点或领域，专有校名应使用介词“at”，并且学校名称需要合理顺序。建议把校名规范化并使用正确介词。

× Well of course my school is a nice place with good teachers and friends, so I feel happy to study here.

✓ Well, of course, my school is a nice place with good teachers and friends, so I am happy to study here.

句子大体正确，但“feel happy to study here”可以更自然地改为“am happy to study here”。同时添加逗号提升语气停顿及可读性。

× I believe if I keep working hard, I will do well in the future and I like to study hard and learn new things every day in my school.

✓ I believe that if I keep working hard, I will do well in the future. I like to study hard and learn new things every day at my school.

原句过长且缺少连词“that”，建议拆成两句以提高清晰度。另外“in my school”更自然使用“at my school”。保持现在进行式“keep working”正确。

× Yes, I would like my school add more library because I'm a university student now.

✓ Yes, I would like my school to add more libraries because I'm a university student now.

动词“would like”后需接不定式“to add”。此外“library”应为复数“libraries”或使用“a library”，根据语境更可能希望增加“更多的图书馆”，因此用复数。建议注意“would like to do”的结构和可数名词复数形式。

× I choose this subject because I like it.

✓ I chose this subject because I like it.

根据上下文这是对过去做出选择的陈述，应该使用过去时“chose”。如果是现在仍在选择中，则原句可保留。这里更自然为过去时。建议根据时间背景选择时态。

× I need more laboratory to read and study in the weekend.

✓ I need more laboratories to read and study on the weekend.

“laboratory”在此处应为复数“laboratories”或用不可数短语“lab space”。此外英语中惯用介词为“on the weekend”。另外“read and study”搭配可接受。建议注意可数名词复数形式和正确介词。

× Will I think it's really important for me.

✓ Well, I think it's really important for me.

原句开头“Will I”不合适，疑似打字或口语错误。应为“Well, I think...”。建议确保句子主语和谓语按常规顺序出现并使用恰当的开头词。

× I like to study hard and learn new things every day.

✓ I like to study hard and learn new things every day.

该句语法正确，无需修改。保持不定式结构“to study/learn”是自然的。

× I believe that if I keep working hard, I will do well in the future and I will get a great job in the future.

✓ I believe that if I keep working hard, I will do well and get a great job in the future.

句子重复“in the future”。将两个并列谓语中的第二个“will”可省略以避免冗余，同时删除重复短语使表达更简洁自然。建议避免重复表达并保持条理。