Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体信息明确，但存在语法和内容不够紧凑的问题。请注意：1) 用词须准确（如专业名称通常不带冠词或复数形式应校正）；2) 避免无关或混淆的信息（“Theatre learning”与“Network Engineering”关系不清）；3) 控制句子数量与长度，保持自然口语节奏；4) 使用连接词使表达更连贯，例如“also”或“for example”。可练习用一到两句主题句加1句具体支持即可。

例: I'm currently a student majoring in Network Engineering. I combine theoretical courses with hands-on projects; for example, I recently finished a group coding assignment that improved my teamwork and programming skills.

提案: 回答中存在多余的引导词和语法问题。请注意：1) 不要用不必要的开头词（例如“And I”）；2) 语法需简洁正确（“bachelors program”应为“bachelor's program”或“a bachelor's degree program”）；3) 动词形式要正确（“makes me attending”应改为“makes attending… convenient”或“makes it convenient for me to attend”）；4) 用一两句直接说明地点并补充一两个具体优点。

例: I study at a university in the city centre, where I'm enrolled in a bachelor's program in Network Engineering. The campus is modern and near public transport, which makes it convenient for me to attend lectures and group meetings.

提案: 回答有肯定但句子结构混乱与不完整的举例。请注意：1) 避免语法错误（例如“in the learning environment is very quiet”应为“the learning environment is quiet”）；2) 举例要完整且具体（“and online”不完整，应说明是什么在线资源）；3) 用连接词使句子流畅；4) 控制长度，不要冗长。

例: Yes, it is. The learning environment is quiet and the campus has well-equipped libraries and study rooms, which help me concentrate. For example, students can book dedicated study rooms and access online journals for research.

提案: 回答具体且有条理，但可进一步精简并提高表达自然度。请注意：1) 使用更自然的短句和连接词（如“also”或“in addition”）；2) 将“the place where I started”改为“my university”或“the campus”；3) 提供优先级或原因使意见更有说服力。

例: Yes. I would like the university to add more quiet study areas and improve lighting to reduce eye strain. In addition, upgrading the Wi‑Fi and providing more comfortable seating would make studying much easier.

提案: 回答清晰但有措辞与逻辑问题。请注意：1) “research restrictions”用词不当，应改为“research opportunities”或“research skills”并说明具体原因；2) 把目标和原因分成清晰的句子并用连接词衔接；3) 可补充具体准备措施或时间安排以增加细节。

例: I'm planning to pursue a master's degree in Computer Science in Hong Kong next year to deepen my knowledge in AI and gain research experience. I also plan to take online courses in data analysis to strengthen my practical skills before starting the master's program.

× I'm currently a student majoring in a Network Engineering and Diversity.

✓ I'm currently a student majoring in Network Engineering and Diversity.

句中不需要在專業名稱前加不定冠詞“a”。當專業或學科作為名詞短語使用時通常不加冠詞。建議去掉“a”。（语法类型ID:22）

× This allows me to combine theatre learning with practical projects.

✓ This allows me to combine theoretical learning with practical projects.

原句 likely 用錯單詞“theatre”（劇場）應為“theoretical”（理論的）。此外“theoretical learning” 作為抽象名詞短語不加冠詞。建議改為“theoretical”。（语法类型ID:22）

× For example, I recently completed this group coding assignment that improved my teamwork and programming skills, which I find very rewarding and interesting.

✓ For example, I recently completed a group coding assignment that improved my teamwork and programming skills, which I found very rewarding and interesting.

句中時態不一致：在描述已完成的任務時應使用過去時“found”。同時“this”改為不定冠詞“a”更自然。建議統一使用過去時並改用“a”。（语法类型ID:26）

× And I started at the university in the city center where I'm enrolled in the bachelors program in network engineering.

✓ I started at the university in the city center, where I'm enrolled in the bachelor's program in Network Engineering.

“bachelors” 應為所有格形式“bachelor's”；專業名稱首字母可大寫以示專業名詞。句首不宜以“And”開頭，改為直接句子並在從句前加逗號。建議改為“bachelor's program”。（语法类型ID:22）

× The campus is modern and close to public transport, which makes me attending lectures and group projects conveniently.

✓ The campus is modern and close to public transport, which makes attending lectures and group projects convenient for me.

“makes me attending” 的結構不正確；動詞“make”後接賓語加不定式或形容詞結構更合適。此處應使用非限定動名詞“attending”作主語或把“for me”放在句尾，並將“conveniently”（副詞）改為形容詞“convenient”。建議改為“makes attending ... convenient for me”。（语法类型ID:11）

× Yes, of course. It's generally a good place to study because in the learning environment is very quiet and well equipped with libraries and sturdy facilities which help concentration and access to resources.

✓ Yes, of course. It's generally a good place to study because the learning environment is very quiet and well equipped with libraries and good facilities, which help with concentration and access to resources.

原句缺少定冠詞“the”置於“learning environment”前；“sturdy facilities” 用法不自然，應改為“good facilities”或具體詞彙；“help concentration” 常用 “help with concentration”。建議加入“the”並調整詞彙和介詞短語。 （语法类型ID:17）

× For example, students can use dedicated study rooms and online.

✓ For example, students can use dedicated study rooms and online resources.

句子不完整，“and online” 缺少名詞，應補充“resources”或類似詞以完成並使意思明確。建議加上“resources”。（语法类型ID:26）

× I would like a few changes to the place where I started.

✓ I would like a few changes to the place where I study.

“the place where I started” 意思模糊且結構不自然，應使用“the place where I study” 或“the place where I started studying”。建議改為更明確的表達。 （语法类型ID:26）

× Also upgrading the Wi-Fi and providing more comfortable seating would make it easier.

✓ Also, upgrading the Wi-Fi and providing more comfortable seating would make studying easier.

原句的指代不清，“make it easier”未指明對象。應明確“make studying easier” 或“make things easier”。同時在句首加逗號使語氣更自然。建議明確受詞。 （语法类型ID:11）

× I'm planning to pursue a master's degree in computer science in Hong Kong next year to deepen my knowledge and prepare for research restrictions, especially in artificial intelligence.

✓ I'm planning to pursue a master's degree in Computer Science in Hong Kong next year to deepen my knowledge and prepare for research roles, especially in artificial intelligence.

“research restrictions” 用詞不當（意思是“研究限制”），上下文應為“research roles” 或“research work”。因此替換為更合適的名詞使句意通順。專業名稱首字母可大寫。建議改為“research roles”。（语法类型ID:11）

× I also intend to take online courses in data analysis to strengthen my practical skills.

✓ I also intend to take online courses in data analysis to strengthen my practical skills.

此句語法正確，時態與語境一致，無需修改。此處列出以表示已檢查且無錯誤。 （语法类型ID:6）