Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答总体清晰且信息充实，但存在语法和表达重复问题。建议：1) 开头用一句直接的主题句回答问题（已做得好）。2) 将支持细节精简为1-2句，避免冗长连接词错误（如“and since... so”应分句或用恰当连接词）。3) 注意冠词和数量词（e.g. “hands-on parts”或“hands-on practice”）。4) 尝试使用更地道的表达替换“really good at practical things”，如“skilled in clinical procedures”。

例: I'm a fourth-year student in a five-year dentistry program. I'm passionate about dentistry, especially the hands-on clinical work, and I'm skilled in practical procedures, so I believe I have the potential to become a good dentist.

提案: 回答直接但有重复与小错误。建议：1) 避免重复词（“historical historic”）并用单个准确形容词。2) 使用更自然的连接和更具体细节（例如说出一两处著名景点或氛围）。3) 将第二句合并以避免冗长，保持总句数不超过5句。

例: I study at Xiamen University, which is well known for its seaside campus and historic buildings. Many students, including some of my friends, chose it because of its strong reputation and beautiful campus scenery.

提案: 回答清楚但有语法和用词小错误。建议：1) 注意冠词和数的搭配（“it's an excellent place”，“one of the most important things”）。2) 用连接词使句子连贯（例如“Furthermore”或“Moreover”）。3) 提供更具体的例子说明设施如何帮助学习（比如设备或实验室类型）。

例: Yes, it's an excellent place to study. One of the biggest advantages is the well-equipped facilities, such as modern dental clinics and simulation labs, which allow us to get extensive hands-on practice.

提案: 回答内容与问题略有偏离（问学校是否需要改变，你却讲个人学习区）。建议：1) 直接回答是否希望学校做出改变，可先给出总体立场。2) 若谈个人习惯，应关联到校园环境的改进建议（如学习区布局、公共学习空间）。3) 使用更清晰的时态，一致表达现在或过去习惯。

例: I think some improvements could be made to the study environment on campus. For instance, more flexible study areas with comfortable seating and greenery would help students focus — personally I often rearrange my desk and add a plant to make my study corner more motivating.

提案: 答案有明确计划但表达有些笨拙且逻辑稍弱。建议：1) 用更自然的时间表达（e.g. “complete my undergraduate degree next year”）。2) 说明为何选择继续深造，给出具体方向或研究兴趣，而不是以“害怕失业”为主因。3) 避免负面或笼统的措辞，改为积极的职业规划理由。

例: I plan to complete my undergraduate degree next year and then pursue a master's in dentistry within a few years. I hope to specialize in restorative dentistry to deepen my clinical skills and improve my career prospects, rather than simply because of job market pressures.

× I am currently a fourth year university student in a five year dentistry program.

✓ I am currently a fourth-year university student in a five-year dentistry program.

句中“fourth year”和“five year”作为复合形容词修饰名词时应使用连字符（hyphen）连接：fourth-year、five-year，这样更符合英语书写规则，避免歧义。建议在复合形容词前加连字符。

× I am passionate about my major, especially the hands on parts, and since I am really good at practical things so I think I can be a good dentist.

✓ I am passionate about my major, especially the hands-on parts, and since I am really good at practical things, I think I can be a good dentist.

原句存在句子结构冗余问题：同时使用了连词“and”和“so”，造成重复连词，应删除其中一个；“hands on”作为复合形容词或名词短语应写为 hands-on；在“practical things”后需要逗号分隔从句。建议使用单一连接词并使用连字符，保持句子简洁。

× It is famous for its seaside campus and historical historic buildings.

✓ It is famous for its seaside campus and historic buildings.

原句中“historical historic”重复使用意义相近的形容词，词语冗余且不自然。应只保留一个合适的形容词，如“historic”。建议避免重复形容词，选择最恰当的一个。

× Many of my friends applied this university because of its reputation as one of the most beautiful universities in China.

✓ Many of my friends applied to this university because of its reputation as one of the most beautiful universities in China.

apply 是不及物动词或及物短语为 apply to (apply for + 名)，这里表示“申请某校”应使用短语 apply to，这句缺少介词 to。建议记住常见动词搭配。

× Definitely, it's a excellent place for our university students to study.

✓ Definitely, it's an excellent place for our university students to study.

在以元音音素开头的单词（excellent）前使用不定冠词时应使用 an 而不是 a。建议根据发音选择 a 或 an。

× I think one of the most important thing is that there are plenty of well equipped facilities here.

✓ I think one of the most important things is that there are plenty of well-equipped facilities here.

短语“one of the most important”后需接复数名词“things”；另外“well equipped”作为复合形容词修饰“facilities”时应加连字符为 well-equipped。建议注意“one of the + 最级 + 复数名词”结构并使用连字符。

× As dental students, I can do many hands on practice.

✓ As dental students, we can do much hands-on practice.

句首“As dental students”指代复数，主语应使用复数代词“we”而不是“I”；“many practice”不自然，practice 在这里作不可数名词，应使用 much 或 a lot of；“hands-on”作为复合形容词需连字符。建议保持主语一致并注意可数/不可数名词用法。

× Yes, I changed the layout of my study area every few months because I think rearranging can give me a sense of refreshment.

✓ Yes, I change the layout of my study area every few months because I think rearranging can give me a sense of refreshment.

句中描述习惯性行为，应使用一般现在时而非过去时“changed”。此外“a sense of refreshment”可接受，但更常用“a sense of refreshment”或“a refreshed feeling”。建议将动词改为一般现在时表示经常性动作。

× For example, I sometimes add a plant to improve this atmosphere and make it more inspiring.

✓ For example, I sometimes add a plant to improve the atmosphere and make it more inspiring.

此处用词问题：用“this atmosphere”显得不自然，应使用定冠词“the atmosphere”来指代前文提到的学习环境。建议使用 the 来特指上下文中的环境。

× I plan to finish my undergraduate study in the next year, and I am going to pursue a masters degree in the next three years.

✓ I plan to finish my undergraduate studies next year, and I am going to pursue a master's degree within the next three years.

时间表达需自然：通常说“next year”而不用“in the next year”；“undergraduate study”更常用复数“undergraduate studies”；“masters degree”应写作 master's degree 并加所有格或连字符；“in the next three years”改为 within the next three years 更符合表示未来三年内的意图。建议调整名词形式和时间介词用法。

× I want to specialize in dentistry because I don't want to be in the situation of unemployment since the competition is aggressive.

✓ I want to specialize in dentistry because I don't want to be unemployed, since the competition is fierce.

原句中“be in the situation of unemployment”表达啰嗦且不自然，改为“be unemployed”更简洁；“the competition is aggressive”用词不当，competition 通常用形容词 fierce 或 intense。建议使用简洁自然的短语并选择正确形容词。