Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更简洁、有条理，并尽量避免犹豫词。开头直接给出身份，然后用1-2句说明时间和专业，再用1句简要解释你为什么开始改变看法，使用连接词使句子连贯。注意语法时态（"I am in my third year"），以及避免重复和语音停顿。

例: I'm a third-year university student majoring in Sociology. At first I didn't like the subject, but after completing a semester I found it much more interesting because the courses helped me understand social issues more clearly.

提案: 回答应直接说明学习地点并清楚表达与家乡的关系与感受。当前回答语法混乱、句子不连贯且含义不明确。使用简单点明的句子，并给出一两个具体理由说明为何你的学习情况受影响（如距离、环境）。

例: I study at a university in Guangdong province, which is quite far from my hometown. Because I'm away from my family, I sometimes find it harder to concentrate at the start of a new semester.

提案: 回答要完整并提供具体细节。先给出总体评价，然后用具体原因支持（交通、设施、资源等），用连接词（such as, for example）使表达更连贯。避免未完成句子。

例: Honestly, I don't think it's a very good place to study because the campus is in a rural area and quite inconvenient. For example, it takes about 30 minutes to get to the city center and there are few shops or entertainment facilities nearby.

提案: 回答要具体说明希望改进的方面，并提供一两个实际例子或期望的效果。避免时态错误（use present perfect: "has made"）和未完成的句子。可先肯定已有变化，再说还希望改进的地方。

例: Yes. The university has made many improvements during my time here — for example, they recently built a small shopping center. I would like them to improve campus transportation and add more study spaces or a larger library.

提案: 回答要更流畅并修正语法与重复。先给出主要计划，然后说明备选方案和原因。使用连接词（however, if not）和恰当的动词短语（"get a master's degree", "graduate"）。

例: I plan to get a master's degree in Hong Kong if possible because it offers strong programs in my field. However, if that doesn't work out, I will start working after I graduate to gain practical experience.

× I'm a student now, this year is my third year of my university life and my major is sociology.

✓ I'm a student now. This year is my third year at university and my major is sociology.

句子中“my third year of my university life”表达冗长且不地道，此外句子过长应分为两句以提高可读性。建议用“my third year at university”更自然。注意时态为现在时，描述当前状态应使用一般现在时。

× The first time I don't like this major but umm when I finish a semester I got the interesting point I in the major.

✓ At first I didn't like this major, but after I finished a semester, I became interested in it.

原句存在多处问题：1) “The first time” 应为“At first”；2) 时态混乱，描述过去的感受应使用过去时（didn't like, finished）；3) “got the interesting point I in the major” 不符合英文表达，应改为“became interested in it”。以上问题对应动词时态和动词+ing 使用错误，需统一为过去时。

× I study in Guangdong province and where is the my hometown is so I'm not really fair to studying.

✓ I study in Guangdong province, which is where my hometown is, so I'm not really focused on studying.

原句中“where is the my hometown is”词序和多余助动词错误，应改为“which is where my hometown is”。另外“not really fair to studying” 用法不对，应使用“not really focused on studying”或“not really serious about studying”。这里涉及介词短语和习惯用法错误。

× Have a new semesters.

✓ There are new semesters starting.

原句没有主语和时态，结构不完整。根据上下文想表达学期开始，应使用完整句型，例如“There are new semesters starting”或“I have new semesters starting”。这属于句子结构错误和缺乏动词。

× To be honest, I don't think so because my school is in the rural area, It's very inconvenient.

✓ To be honest, I don't think so because my school is in a rural area; it's very inconvenient.

“in the rural area”用法不自然，通常说“in a rural area”。注意大写标点错误，“It's”不应在分号后大写。时态为一般现在时正确，仅需修正冠词和标点。

× There's it takes about 30 minutes to the center of the city and there's no.

✓ It takes about 30 minutes to get to the city center, and there are no shops/shops nearby.

原句“It takes about 30 minutes to the center”中缺少介词“to get to”或直接说“to the city center”也可，但更自然为“get to the city center”。句末“and there's no.”不完整，应补全名词。注意冠词和句子完整性问题。

× Yes, I would. To be honest, my school had had made a lot of change during the three years of my university life.

✓ Yes, I would. To be honest, my school has made a lot of changes during my three years at university.

原句“had had made”时态错误，过去完成时不适用于持续到现在的情况，应使用现在完成时“has made”。另外“a lot of change”应为复数“a lot of changes”或不可数时用“much change”。时态和名词数量需修正。

× At first there's no shopping center in the university, but now they build a.

✓ At first there was no shopping center at the university, but now they have built one.

原句时态和结构错误：描述过去应使用过去时“there was”，现在完成或现在完成进行“have built”表示已建成且影响到现在。句尾“they build a.”不完整，需补全为“they have built one”。同时介词应为“at the university”更自然。

× I plan to earn a master degree in Hong Kong if if it's possible I think, but if not I will go to work after my graduate.

✓ I plan to earn a master's degree in Hong Kong if possible, but if not, I will go to work after I graduate.

原句有重复“if if”，名词短语“master degree”应为“master's degree”。“after my graduate”错误，应为“after I graduate”或“after graduation”。此外条件从句中可用一般现在时表示将来可能性，“if possible”更简洁自然。