Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a direct, natural reply and correct place name and grammar. Use one clear sentence stating you are a student and where you study. Avoid repetition and incorrect words.

例: I'm a student. I study at Basin High School, where I'm currently in my second year.

提案: Answer clearly with the correct name of the school and avoid repeating the verb. Provide one short supporting detail about the school (e.g., location or type).

例: I attend Bossina Prep School, which is a private school located near the city center.

提案: State your opinion directly and give a clear, specific reason. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid vague or confusing words like 'business' if you mean 'basin' or 'area'.

例: Not really, because the school is in a noisy area and I often find it hard to concentrate during classes.

提案: Respond directly and explain briefly why you would or would not want changes. Use correct tense and clearer vocabulary (e.g., 'I wouldn't want changes because I like...').

例: I wouldn't want many changes because I like the teachers and the friendly atmosphere, although improving the library would be helpful.

提案: Give a clear main idea and expand with one specific detail about why or how you will study those subjects. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I plan to study science and mathematics at university because I'm interested in engineering, and I also want to continue studying music as a hobby.

× I'm a student. I'm studying so I study in basin.

✓ I'm a student. I study in Basin.

The original mixes continuous and simple present incorrectly and uses a lowercase/place name error. 'I'm studying' implies current ongoing action; 'I study in Basin' (simple present) is appropriate for a habitual fact about where the student attends school. Also Basin should be capitalized as a proper noun. Suggestion: use one consistent present tense form that matches the meaning and capitalize place names.

× I'm studying in Seuss. I'm studying in Bossina prep school.

✓ I study at Bossina Prep School in Seuss.

Using 'I'm studying' twice is repetitive; for routines or locations, simple present 'I study' or 'I attend' is better. Use the preposition 'at' with schools and capitalize the proper names. Combine the information to produce a single clear sentence.

× No, it's not good. Uh, because it's the place. It's not good place because business is dangerous.

✓ No, it's not good because the place is unsafe; the neighborhood is dangerous.

The phrase 'the place' is vague and 'not good place' misses the indefinite article 'a' ('not a good place'). 'Business is dangerous' is ungrammatical and likely a wrong word choice; 'neighborhood' or 'area' and 'dangerous' convey the intended meaning. Also avoid sentence fragments like 'Uh, because it's the place.' Suggestion: use complete sentences and correct articles.

× No, I don't change because I love Basin become I'm I'm loyal for forever.

✓ No, I wouldn't change it because I love Basin and I'm loyal to it forever.

'I don't change' is incorrect for expressing willingness; 'I wouldn't change it' or 'I would not change it' fits the conditional/ hypothetical question about preferences. 'Become' is the wrong word; use 'because' or 'and'. 'I'm loyal for forever' is ungrammatical: use 'I'm loyal to it forever.' Also include the object 'it' after 'change'. Suggestion: use conditional modal 'would' and correct preposition 'to' for loyalty.

× I want to study science and music and math.

✓ I want to study science, music, and math.

The original is grammatically acceptable but needs parallel list punctuation: use commas to separate list items and include the Oxford comma for clarity. The verb 'want to study' correctly expresses future intention. Suggestion: format lists clearly for natural speech/writing.