Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and grammatical. Give a clear topic sentence stating whether you work or study, then add a brief detail about your job or field. Avoid filler words (uh) and incorrect phrases like "not the students."

例: I currently work full-time as a junior architect at a small design firm. I focus on residential projects, so I spend most days preparing drawings and meeting clients.

提案: Use the correct tense and give a precise answer. If you studied in the past, say when and what you studied. Add one short supporting detail to make your answer informative and natural.

例: I studied in Kyoto for four years, where I completed a bachelor's degree in architecture at Kyoto University.

提案: Answer directly and give specific reasons using clear linking words. Avoid saying the place name with an article ("a Kyoto") and reduce hesitation. Provide two short, connected reasons and an example.

例: Yes, Kyoto is a great place to study because it has a rich history and many cultural sites, which inspired my architectural studies and offered many field-study opportunities.

提案: Clarify your meaning before answering. State whether you would like changes, then specify one or two realistic changes and explain why. Keep sentences short and avoid unclear words like "praise."

例: Yes, I would like the university to improve its studio facilities by adding more large-format printers and extended opening hours so students can complete large drawings and models.

提案: Make your intentions clear and use correct verb forms. Start with a topic sentence about your plan, then give specific steps or goals. Avoid word errors like "eatery" and "architected."

例: In the future I plan to study abroad to gain international experience in architecture; I hope to enroll in a master's program in Europe and then work at an international firm to become a licensed architect.

× Now I work. And, uh, not the students.

✓ Now I work. I'm not a student.

The original uses 'not the students', which incorrectly replaces the speaker's intended meaning. Use the first-person singular pronoun 'I' and the noun 'student' in singular: 'I'm not a student.' This fixes pronoun reference and article/number usage.

× I had studied in Kyoto.

✓ I studied in Kyoto.

Using past perfect 'had studied' implies a relation to another past event, which is not present here. Simple past 'studied' correctly states a past action without needing another reference point.

× Yeah, a Kyoto is a great place to study.

✓ Yes, Kyoto is a great place to study.

Place names like Kyoto do not take an indefinite article 'a'. Also 'Yeah' is informal; 'Yes' is a clearer response. Remove the article to correct usage.

× The. Uh, something because, uh, history and the culture have.

✓ It has a long history and a rich culture.

The original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Rephrase to a complete sentence: use 'It' to refer to Kyoto, and verbs 'has' with noun phrases 'a long history' and 'a rich culture' for clarity and correct structure.

× I would like to, uh, praise. I studied to make some any changes.

✓ I would like to suggest some changes to the place where I studied.

The original is confused and contains irrelevant words ('praise', 'some any'). Reconstruct the sentence to match the question: use 'would like to suggest' and 'some changes' and a clear object 'the place where I studied.' This fixes word choice and sentence structure.

× In the future I will go abroad in eatery to run architecture and uh, I want to be architected.

✓ In the future I will go abroad to study architecture, and I want to be an architect.

The original has multiple errors: 'in eatery' is incorrect (wrong preposition and noun), 'to run architecture' is unidiomatic, and 'be architected' misuses the passive. Use 'go abroad to study architecture' for intention and 'be an architect' for the desired profession. This corrects preposition use, verb choice, and noun form.