Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and redundant phrases like "to be honest" and "that's it."

例: I'm a student. I'm currently studying English on a course abroad, and I spend most of my free time practicing speaking and reading to improve my fluency.

提案: Give a clear place and organize details with linking words. Begin with the location, then add one or two specific activities you do there. Finish the sentence—avoid trailing off. Reduce hesitations and use precise vocabulary (e.g., "self-study at a private language school").

例: I study at a private language school and also do self-study at home. For example, in the mornings I read English newspapers to learn vocabulary, and I focus especially on speaking practice to gain confidence.

提案: You left this question unanswered. Always respond directly with a topic sentence stating whether it is a good place, then give one or two reasons with linking words. Keep it brief and specific.

例: Yes, it's a good place to study because it's quiet and well-equipped. For instance, it has a library and friendly teachers who give useful feedback.

提案: Be decisive and give clear reasons. Start with a direct statement (I wouldn't change anything / I would change X). Then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid vague words like "convincing" and remove hesitations.

例: I wouldn't change anything about my favorite room because it's comfortable and quiet, which helps me concentrate. Also, the lighting is good for reading and studying for long periods.

提案: Clarify your goals and organize sentences logically. Start with a clear plan (e.g., "I plan to get an IELTS score of X"), then explain the next step and reason. Use correct vocabulary (e.g., "focus on" not "study a ropes") and avoid trailing off.

例: First, I plan to prepare for the IELTS to reach a high score. After that, I want to study philosophy at university because I hope to conduct research in that field.

× To be honest, I'm a student because I'm studying English on my course abroad.

✓ To be honest, I'm a student because I'm studying English on a course abroad.

The phrase 'on my course abroad' is awkward and ungrammatical in English. Use the preposition 'on' with 'a course' and omit 'my' or replace with 'a' to indicate enrollment; 'abroad' modifies 'course'. Suggestion: 'on a course abroad' or 'in a course abroad'.

× Uh, I spend most of my free time to study English because, uh, that's it.

✓ Uh, I spend most of my free time studying English because, uh, that's it.

After 'spend (time)' the verb should take the -ing form (gerund), not the infinitive 'to study'. Use 'studying' to show how time is spent.

× To be honest, I study by myself in my private school or in the morning, I read some newspaper and I know some vocabulary.

✓ To be honest, I study by myself at a private school, or in the morning I read newspapers and learn vocabulary.

Multiple issues: use 'at a private school' (correct preposition and article), 'read some newspaper' should be plural 'read newspapers' or 'read a newspaper', and 'I know some vocabulary' is unnatural; use 'learn vocabulary' to describe studying. These changes fix article, preposition, and verb choice.

× Especially I'm interested in, uh, speaking English because.

✓ I'm especially interested in speaking English.

Sentence fragment: 'because' at the end leaves the clause incomplete and 'especially' is better placed before the verb. Remove 'because' or complete the reason. Suggested concise form without 'because'.

✓ (No answer given)

The student gave no response to 'Is it a good place to study?' so there is no sentence to correct. Note: respond verbally in the test with a complete sentence.

× Maybe I, I don't want to change anything in my favorite room because I feel very, it's very convincing for me.

✓ Maybe I don't want to change anything in my favorite room because it feels very comfortable to me.

'Convincing' is misused; adjectives like 'comfortable' or 'pleasant' fit better. Remove the duplicate 'I' and the awkward 'I feel very, it's very'. Use 'it feels very comfortable to me' for natural expression.

× Although, uh, uh, it's uh.

✓ (Omitted filler words) It suits me well.

The original is only filler sounds and an incomplete clause. Replace with a complete present-tense sentence such as 'It suits me well' to answer why no changes are needed.

× Up till I guess an IELTS score, I would study a ropes.

✓ Until I reach the IELTS score I want, I will study a lot.

'Up till I guess an IELTS score' is ungrammatical; use 'Until I reach the IELTS score I want'. 'I would study a ropes' contains incorrect modal and noun: 'would' is inappropriate here and 'ropes' is wrong; use 'will study a lot' or 'will study intensively'.

× Especially I will study philosophy achieve this subject because I want to uh, do some research.

✓ In particular, I will study philosophy to specialize in this subject because I want to do some research.

The phrase 'study philosophy achieve this subject' is ungrammatical. Use 'study philosophy to specialize in this subject' or 'study philosophy and focus on this area'. Also remove filler 'uh' and use 'want to do some research' for clarity.