Study— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer a complete natural sentence and avoid short fragmented replies. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one concise supporting detail. Use a contraction or full form consistently and correct article usage (a part-time master's degree).

例: I'm both a student and a teacher. I work as a school teacher and I'm currently studying for a part-time master's degree in English.

提案: Give a slightly fuller response: include the full name once and a brief detail about what you study there to sound natural and informative. Use linking words if you add extra information.

例: I study at The Chinese University of Hong Kong in Shatin, where I'm taking courses in English literature as part of my master's programme.

提案: Avoid grammatical errors and fragmented phrases. Use a clear topic sentence, then provide 1–2 specific supporting details with linking words. Correct collocations ("nice scenery", "good air") and subject-verb agreement are needed.

例: Yes, it's a great place to study because it has beautiful scenery and clean air. In addition, the library is large and well-equipped, so it's one of the best universities in Hong Kong for study resources.

提案: Be more structured: start with a direct answer, then give a specific improvement and a brief reason. Avoid filler words (uh) and combine ideas cohesively with linking phrases.

例: Yes, I would like it to be closer to my home. Alternatively, it should have better transport links, such as a regular shuttle bus, because that would make commuting much easier.

提案: Keep the answer focused and grammatically correct. Start with a clear plan sentence, then give specific preferences and reasons. Avoid asking the examiner a question—stay on topic. Correct prepositions and word choice ("preferably in Europe or the UK" rather than "do it in").

例: I plan to pursue a PhD in history, preferably in Europe or the UK, because I want to study European archives and work with specialists in my field.

× Student: Student. I'm both actually. I work as a teacher and I'm studying a part-time masters degree in English.

✓ Student: I am a student and I also work. I work as a teacher and I am studying for a part-time master's degree in English.

Pronoun and sentence clarity: 'Student. I'm both actually.' is fragmented and unclear. 'Student' used alone is not a pronoun and the sentence should state 'I am a student and I also work.' Also use 'studying for a part-time master's degree' not 'studying a part-time masters degree'. Use 'master's' with an apostrophe to show possession and 'for' with 'studying' to indicate the program being pursued. Suggestion: Combine into a full sentence, use 'I am' instead of 'I'm' only where clarity matters, include 'for' with 'studying', and use the possessive form 'master's'.

× Student: I study at the CUHK in Shatin.

✓ Student: I study at CUHK in Shatin.

Article usage with institution names: 'the CUHK' is unnecessary; many university names do not require the definite article. Use 'at CUHK' for natural present tense statement about attendance. Suggestion: Omit 'the' before abbreviations of university names unless the name requires it.

× Student: Yeah, is scenery. The air is good, the library is big and is one of the finest university in Hong Kong.

✓ Student: Yes, the scenery is beautiful. The air is good, the library is large, and it is one of the finest universities in Hong Kong.

Multiple issues: 'Yeah, is scenery.' is a fragment and incorrect word order; it should be 'the scenery is...'. 'Big' is acceptable but 'large' or 'spacious' is more natural. 'is one of the finest university' has subject-verb and number agreement: 'one of the finest universities' (plural) and needs the pronoun 'it' before 'is'. Suggestion: Use full sentences, include subject 'it' when referencing the place, use plural 'universities' after 'one of the'.

× Student: Yeah, I would like it to be nearer to my home or it could have a better connection in terms of transportation, like uh. Shuttle bus.

✓ Student: Yes, I would like it to be nearer my home, or to have better transport connections, such as a shuttle bus.

Preposition and phrasing: 'nearer to my home' is acceptable in some dialects but more natural is 'nearer my home' or 'closer to my home'; choose one. 'Connection in terms of transportation' is wordy; use 'transport connections'. 'Like uh. Shuttle bus.' is fragmented; use 'such as a shuttle bus.' Suggestion: Use concise prepositional phrases and avoid fragments; combine clauses for clarity.

× Student: I plan to do a PhD in history, preferably to do it in Europe or England. Or do you like the states?

✓ Student: I plan to do a PhD in history, preferably in Europe or England, or possibly in the United States.

Tense and phrasing: 'preferably to do it in Europe or England' is redundant; say 'preferably in Europe or England'. The question 'Or do you like the states?' is incorrect in context and pronoun use; probably intended 'Or would I like the United States?' or 'or in the United States.' Use 'United States' rather than the informal 'the states'. Suggestion: Use consistent future intention phrasing ('I plan to') and list locations clearly; avoid informal or unclear questions.